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A Shutter Click: Snowblind

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by Desejo11/16/12

There are some great images and lines in this - and I can FEEL the cold.
A couple of suggestions/considerations:
The first two lines of the second stanza stand apart from the rest of the poem. I thought at first it was the "plume of pleasure under a cold nose" that was bothering me, because it seemed a bit much. Though I really like the image. I think you may be able to save it by changing the next line to "as the camera eye clicks" - which balances out the nose and yet keeps the action. I don't know. See what you think. Overall I really like this.

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by tazz31711/16/12

THE VISTA OF THE 1ST SNOWFALL

magnificent and woe to the work ahead, TK U MLJ LV NV

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by HarryHill11/19/12

very (squared) nice

I've been away and found a line of poems to read so... I decided to start at the bottom and work my way up, glad I did. 5ed ...upward

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by demure10112/03/12

Very nice,

evocative writing. To be revisited!

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