After looking into this series, I'm seeing that you're using several points of view (story telling). Pick one and stay with it. All the back and forth is annoying.
This is kind of an in-between story, but did a good job of bringing out Andy's ambivalance along with his lust for Natalie, What about the Jessoca factor, though? Is it a case of "I nailed one of my sisters, maybe the other would like some of that too." ? Or is there something else? Has she shown any attraction to him? Maybe 05 will let us in on what's going on in their heads.
I like the story so far but Andy is kind of an ass hole. He wants her, he doesn't, Most incest stories have romance and intimacy in them. This one clearly does not. Andy makes no attempt to eat his sister's pussy (intimate) Now he is going to distance himself. His own dream when Jessica says something about his taking his sisters and throwing them away. That is what he is doing or getting ready to do. Most bro/sis incest, they really love each other. You have put no romance or intimacy in this one.
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After looking into this series, I'm seeing that you're using several points of view (story telling). Pick one and stay with it. All the back and forth is annoying.
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This is kind of an in-between story, but did a good job of bringing out Andy's ambivalance along with his lust for Natalie, What about the Jessoca factor, though? Is it a case of "I nailed one of my sisters, maybe the other would like some of that too." ? Or is there something else? Has she shown any attraction to him? Maybe 05 will let us in on what's going on in their heads.
A bit confusing...
The addition of the other sister throw me bit, but I enjoyed this overall.
I like the story so far but Andy is kind of an ass hole. He wants her, he doesn't, Most incest stories have romance and intimacy in them. This one clearly does not. Andy makes no attempt to eat his sister's pussy (intimate) Now he is going to distance himself. His own dream when Jessica says something about his taking his sisters and throwing them away. That is what he is doing or getting ready to do. Most bro/sis incest, they really love each other. You have put no romance or intimacy in this one.
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