Olivia and Derrick

So wish this was longer

Great start can't wait to read more please don't keep us waiting ;-)

:(

Too short!

More, more, more, great way to meet the 1st time

more

This was way too short, cant wait to read more!

Her roomie need to have a good ass excuse for screwing on her bed. I wonder if that was her first time using Olivia's bed. Well at least Kyle had the decency to help her with her dropped things but I definitely would not have ran off without giving blondie an ear full.

Great Start

I love the story, but way too short. Continue it soon!

a pathetic fat black chick?

this story sounds too familiar, she's going to win the heart of the white guy? and forgets he's just been in her bed? with her room mate who treats her like shit? he'll win her over? come on make her character strong to resist him for at leat 5 chapters. She's going to help him overcome his loss? hmmmm

Good Start

I like the story and look forwrd to more installments. The only thing I don't care for is seeing that she has a 42D chest-doesn't sound appealing or sexy to me.

5!

Olivia is good, shy or not I would have went off if I saw my roommate and a guy fucking on my bed! So disrespectful, hopefully Derrick didn't know that it was her bed but still the roommate should be punched...lol great start though a bit short but can't wait to see where this goes so update frequently : )

what a disrespectful roomate!!

On her bed? Gross!!

Good start, but needs longer chapters.

I like this story and it started getting good then....nothing. Please write ch. 2. soon and make it longer. Olivia does need a backbone. I mean why was the roommate on her damn bed, unless she knew Olivia had a crush on Derrick and was trying to hurt her. Derrick needs to work for it and beg if they end up being together. Anyway, I like the story because every romance can't be simple and easy. This has some dirt...it's interesting, but she better let both of those freaks have it!

Great, but why was the chapter so short?

Damn that is just skank nasty, having sex on you roommates bed. How rude, she should beat her roommate!! Next time can we have a longer chapter please.

THAT IS TO BE EXPECTED

in dorm rooms and weird roomies, TK U MLJ LV NV

WTF

that was so fuck up on her bed i woulda went H.A.M. on them

Very good start!

On her bed? Brilliant! Like it....a very good start...leaves us all hanging somewhat, but that's fine, as long as we get another chapter within hours! Thank you!

hmmm i love it

i love this story... Keep writing this story, i think that you are very talented a even bigger bonus is that its interracial which i love to read i'm love that you have a sista with some curves lol not to mention the fact that you made derrick be from a wealthy family then when he loses his parents he's a drug dealer... I agree that her roommate was grimy but i didnt lik that you had her turn towards food because she seen her crush an roommate smushing i think that olivia should have walk back towards her dorm room and smacked the troll (her roommate) for disrespecting her bed like that... But please write more of this story and other's like it -cumonmi

i love it but....

i love it but i wish it was longer. please.

LOVE IT SO FAR

I really wish you had made it longer. You seemed to have ended the chapter in a weird spot but either way I have a feeling that this will be a great series :D I hope you update soon and not leave us hanging like many of the other authors on here! 5 stars!

Loved it

Your story line has started of great ! I hope yu continue !

on her bed?!

Eww that would've been a fight. I don't know if I could get over the imagery I would have to burn everything on it and buy brain bleach, anyways so far so good please make it longer next time.

Good start

I'm liking this story so far and am excited to read more.

Aw hell naw

Me and home girl would be kicking major ass, on her bed though? On her bed!? Other then that great start.

Rude!!!! She is so rudeeeee!!

*burns bed and mattress *
Doesn't she have a bed! Nasty girl.


More plaseeeeee ;)

Eewwww!

You're gonna have sex with some other skeezer on MY BED!? Shy be damned I would've cursed his ass out. lol

Lmao

These comments are too funny, but true lol

wow!

if i ever saw my roommate fucking on my bed i would sure as hell beat both of their asses while their still fucking

DREAM ON DREAM ON

but remember what the early bird gets. TK U MLJ LV NV

*****

Enjoyed reading the comments.

Promising start.

Five.

man i would have......

If i walked in on some shit like that on my bed i would have taken a bat to my roomates room and broke everything in there, mirror, dresser, EVERYTHING!!! And i would have called them all kinds of nasty and went to the dormroom supervisor (whatever their called) @ demand an updated vaccine record of my roommate.

home girl would have gotta a good ole Alabama beat down