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nice
good pacing and kind of sweet
Stupid and written for sicko's like the last anon.
Just another in a continuing string of garbage tales written as supposed "erotica" but in reality only pathetic trash by brain damaged authors.
i agree
with the sicko comment written for losers who try to convince each other their normal.
Good story
I thought it was a good, simple easy to read story. Well paced, decent descriptions. Good depiction of a loving couple that trust each other and have fun. I love seeing the negative comments. Especially those who are so negative over a persons story. Everyone who read stories on literotica are here to get turned on. Not everyone is going to like everything. But to be so negative and think people are sick for writing about certain subjects is hilarious. It's fiction, treat it as such. It's not a big deal.
Editing
Hot. NO doubt! But hard to read!
Significant pronoun-itis gender errors. Often not clear who was doing what, even if the 'who' was Sweetie or Hubby or Bull, because 'he' and 'him' and 'his' were often used for Sweetie! (Didn't catch any 'she' for the guys.)
After finishing first draft, put it away for several days, then go back and read it as though it is the first time!
I've just started..
Giving 5's to any story that has some anonymous asshole complaining about the content.
Liked it
Good story, credible and well told.
A great erotic fanatsy or maybe an experience
Would like more from this author
re: padma bear
I'll just automatically give a 1* to any story that has a comment made by you.
Editing
Needs editing
I'm not the Grammar police but....
This was SO difficult to read because of all the grammatical errors that I gave it a "1".
Editing!!!
I dropped my rating from 4 to 3 because the story was VERY carelessly told! Too often, the male pronoun was used when it coulda easily referred to EITHER Woody (or 'woody' - Hubby) or Theo (the Bull). 'She' was no problem ... gotta be Sweetie! (except the times that 'she' was shortened to 'he' and it looked like there was some gay action!)
There were times that it seemed Sweetie was playing 'Twister' no matter WHICH dude was getting that particular service! Odd, since Bull was ostensibly to get a knob-job (until the rule changed near the end!)
There were several instances in which it seems clear that letters were omitted which made the sentence either different OR unintelligible! (Such as 'here' becoming 'her')
sluts and cucks are special.
Sorry you can't satisfy your wife.
FETISH
why the hell did they get married? they should have just put him down. everybody wins
I like this one
this presenter paints a very good story... thanks you
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