All Comments on 'Mei Meets a Monster Ch. 08'

1st, let me point out that I haven't read beyond this chapter yet.

If you're going to make a woman become someone's "bitch" and love them, etc, there needs to be more that goes into it.

We readers don't have a problem suspending our disbelief with the whole demon/monster theme (as that's what we came for) but when you have humans not act as they might if they were really in whatever situation you're putting them in... well, That is a harder thing for readers to get past.

Simply put, people don't really give in so easily. If this Sarah is going to be like Lillian was, and basically be Mei's sex slave, then she should give in more slowly. (Unless you include some mind-altering element. But that wasn't in this chapter, at least not until the tentacle monster at the end.)

Other than that, it's a good read. So keep it up

Thanks for the feedback. My first story and it is evolving in a chaotic, have no idea where this is going kind of way. Really appreciate your comments and will try to take on board as I wrap up the last chapters