All Comments on 'Muscle and Music Ch. 02'

Vaughn are such a stubborn guy. And scared out of his mind for his feelings towards Laurie.. Liked it a lot. Poor guy;-)

I like both these guys. I can see their bumpy road ahead and look forward to seeing it.

You have created such great characters. Vaugn def. has some growing to do. Keep up the good story.

tooo short. need more please!

For the sake of argument, what kinda door were they putting in that would break a leg and why in the hell didn't Vaughn just go to the hospital from the site instead of going home?

Mmm, I agree - this needs a little editing - dropping the door and cracking the bone is fine, but his staff would have taken him to hospital - it's not the kind of injury anyone would ignore till the end of the working day. If it's a hairline fracture, the hospital wouldn't give morphine - they'd give codeine or similar. Morphine is extremely addictive, and is never prescribed casually, in a situation such as this. Just a little more tweaking needed to make this whole sequence more believable. Also, wouldn't Laurie wait for him? It seems a bit cold to take him to hospital and leave him there, without transport home? Laurie seems rather fun, so . . . promising, overall.

But is it enjoyable? Yes. I would very much like to know what happens next and I am willing not to nit pick over the details if the story continues.

Eagerly awaiting the next chapter...

I am enjoying this story very much! Please keep writing, we want to see how this great story ends! Keep up the good work!

these chapters need to be longer.overall goodjob on crafting the characters i like how i had to wait to get their names it was fun i was like ahh..when it happened loved it well done hurry up with the next one

Hate to be pedantic, but a broken bone is synonymous with a fracture. That is a really common error that kills me every time! I happen to be a doctor ;)

Loving the story but I agree with some of the other commenters that I little more editing and fleshing out would make it even more enjoyable.