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Longing to break her off.

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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous11/26/12

tell and show

This piece is too obvious, as if a Dominant's stream of consciousness is not restrained You tell too much and show too little. This makes this piece un-erotic.

Maybe, try again?

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by Mo_B_Dick11/27/12

Back to the drawing board. Thanks you guys.

I'm going to spend some more time in the forum section, and keep learning.
I admit that story was an impulse.
Honesty and suggestions always appreciated.

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by Mo_B_Dick11/27/12

@ Anon

Don't tell me, show me...I agree with you on that.
Thanks.

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by tazz31711/27/12

IS HE TRYING TO CONVINCE SOMEONE ELSE

or himself to do or not to do, TK U MLJ LV NV

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by Cinner12/07/12

Liking

I liked it.

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