by sexy_bosoxgirl
I not sure you ever made it back to the present time. You state that Tammy was glad she was brought to the night club 8 months ago and then gave us the start to the detail about how this game started on the dance floor by going in to a flash back but you never came out of the flash back. So outside of being a little confused on weather we are still in a flash back or if you jump back to present time, I think you have a good start to a story. Hoping your next chapter will clear up this time confusion.
Oh! Very nice. Please don't end it there. I so want to see what will happen next. Keep up the great work. This is the first of your stories I have read and now I can't wait to read more... ummm which one.. which... ah that one... Thanks so much for having the courage to post your stories for us to read. :D
Mmmmmmmm, oh yes this is a wonderful start to a very hot mate as they start their journey. Looking forward to more soon.
I want to thank all of you that has taken the time to make a comment. I appreciate everyone. I just hope I don't disappoint any of you. I am currently working on the second chapter. So look for it soon....
Great start, no amazing start, that I didn't realize that it's not the hole story I'm getting now I have to wait for the next chapter. It's ok, I'll have you as my fav so I won't forget! XD
What a jerk. What did he expect her to do when he was so rude when she tried to introduce herself?
It feels very rushed. And she adjusts so quickly it's freaky.
Naming songs relates it to our world, but unless there's substantial differences, that you didn't tell us about, the vast majority of people would not react to the werewolf heritage and vampire mate thing that way.
She's less moved about not being human than I've seen some people react to finding out their great grand father was from country C instead of country A before they came to america.