The Mall Santa

A Thrill A Minute

Uhhhhh...... I mean very nice!

As Always

Wonderful!

You do Great Work!

Alan

Great

Very romantic, very nice. I love happy endings.

As always

It is a pleasure to read your stories! Looking for more from you. Thanks

Wonderful

that's the only word for it

Good Christmas Tale!

Nice Happy Story! Glad to see not everyone is a liar or a cheater. Merry Christmas All!

you blew it right away

I wish you would have wished readers a Merry Christmas instead of "happy holidays". I would have guessed someone who posted stories would not be so afraid of offending someone. Being PC all the time sucks.

"I need to tell you the story about Sharon and I." DGHear ... you're too good a writer not to know about something as simple as the object of a preposition. If you'd like to know why it should read "about Sharon and me" you have only to pick up a third grade textbook on English grammar. This isn't much, you might say, but it's as annoying as a grain of sand in the eye of an otherwise interested reader.

Good Overall

I liked your story overall. Very nice telling. You did, however make a few mistakes. In the beginning of the story you tell how Jeff was 2 years working at mall security before getting promoted to head of security. A few paragraphs later, you contradict yourself and say that Jeff was promoted 1 year later. That muddled things a bit. Might be good to get some editing help. Or more editing help. You're a good writer, with good stories. You should take just a little more time with them and polish them up more.

"story about Sharon and I"

I'm seconding the comment of my fellow in anonymity: Getting this right is very important to readers who give a damn about the language. I call phrases like "about Sharon and I" piss-elegant errors. The writer who commits them probably has been corrected at some point in his education for saying something like "Me and D.G. went to the movies," and didn't understand what he had done wrong. So he always uses "I" when talking or writing about himself and another person, without considering the function of the first person pronoun in the sentence. "I" is a nominative case pronoun and should be used as the subject of a sentence: "I went to the movies." "Me" is an objective case pronoun and should be used as the object of a verb or preposition: "The teacher corrected me," or "the story was about me." The case of the pronoun does not change when the pronoun is used along with another person's name or another pronoun. If the first person pronoun is used with another name in the subject, you should use "I." ("D.G. and I went to the movies.") If the first person pronoun is used with another name as object of a verb or preposition, you should use "me." ("The teacher corrected D.G. and me" or "the story was about Sharon and me.") Sand in the eye is a good analogy for the way this piss elegant error makes lots of readers feel. It can make me stop reading right at that point unless the story already has shown redeeming value that makes persisting worth the pain.

Great, as usual *****

You are the best at story telling. Thanks (even with only a couple of typos).

Another great story

I had a girl next store that I grew up with and she moved away when we started the seventh grade. Never did get with her again. But, I was luck and met a great girl and have been married 48 years. Thanks for story

Agree

DG, you are one of the very best writers on this site, and this story merely confirms my judgment. Please, though, pay heed to the Anonymous grammarian who elegantly and lengthily reminded you that prepositions take objects in the objective case. In all of your great stories I have from time to time cringed when coming across examples of the type of error that he or she focusses upon. They detract from this reader's enjoyment of your work.

Yep

Another great story.....Thanks

Another great story

You have done it again. Thank you for a great story. I have tried to read most of your writing, but there is so many great ones.

Thanks

Another good one spun from a maestro.

Another great story! Thanks, can't wait for your next one.

It is a treat to come home and have a DGH story to read

Great story. Smooth and well paced. DG stories are like sipping a glass of your favorite port - you know what is coming and you just enjoy the smooth rich ride.

A great, feel-good story...

...with a lovely set of characters.
Thank you DGH

very good

Thank you. It was more than a bangemup story. I thought fairly well developed.

Another great story!!!

you have done it again another great and easy reading stoy of two good people getting togethe thru a litttle help form outside and luck and in this case a wwondefull red haired little girl who just gave Santa her christmas wish>

Sweet

A charming story, romantic but with a sexual vein to balance it out.

A fantastic story!

As always I love this and all of your work I have read. Thanks DG for another fantastic story.

Modern Day Miracle on 34th St

I did see the references to Miracle on 34th St as well as other classic holiday movies and found my heart touched as I read. I loved this gentle and sweet story of two people destined to fall in love. This is a wonderful story and well worth my tears.

Great Christmas Story*****

Man you realy know redheads the description of Sharon body for a redhead was dead on the money. Thanks for sharing this Christmas gem!!!

Beautiful!

A very lovely Holiday story. Thank you,DGH.

Ho Ho Ho

Was what she was not!

Fine Holiday tale, well done

Another great story!

Thank you for sharing your talent with us. Its always a great treat to read your wonderful stories. Ho Ho Ho!!!

Very good story

Enjoyed the pace, just right. Great story. You are one of my favorite author's. Thanks for the story.

Santa is real!

Look in your hearts! that's were Santa is! A story like this does make Santa real because of the all the love in ev erybodies hearts. Thank you Mr. Hear for such a beautiful story

i am a book bug

I am a book bug and absolutely love your little story thank you!

Well Done

Now that is a proper Love Story! Sounds as if this may be based on factual incidents. It really doesn't matter I loved it!
Thanks

It passed the test

I could tell where this was headed as soon as Jeff agreed to be Santa, but even so I read every word and loved it all. As you always do, you did a great job as a storyteller. Thank you for sharing this with us. And Merry Christmas!

Well, you're still the man...

... nobody can hit the heart strings quite like you can and as much as I dislike 90% of the "Romance" stories on this site, I'm becoming convinced it is your best category. It's exactly 2 minutes until 2013 and I can't think of a better way to end 2012 than reading one of your stories. Here's wishing you a happy and productive coming year.

A truly beautiful piece.
Thank you for sharing it.

Heart-warming

It was truly a magnificent love story.

Thank you

You always do tell a great story. I'm not sure how I missed this one when it was posted. I enjoyed reading it.
Thank you.

Dialogues

The dialogues on Page 1 seem a bit hackneyed.

"My God! I can't believe this!"
"It's true Sharon!"
"I believe you"

Oh well. Good story otherwise. 4.5/5

Yes it was terribly predictable -

SO WHAT?

I still read every word and still had this problem with fuzzy vision - it is foggy in my office - and I enjoyed it completely.

The fun was not in a surprise ending or even the lack of a surprise journey it was all in the details of the trip -

Thanks -

It's Jess' turn

DG HEAR, It is time for 'lil Jess to pay it forward... Let her look back upon her life from the perspective of a 30+ year old adult, and see that she tells the story of how her Christmas wish came true for her then... and how it will now unfold in reverse for some lucky boy and his Dad... If of course, your not too busy... Those green eyes and red curls would deliver a smashing impact from under an Elf's hat and garb... As always, the Secretary will disavow any knowledge of your actions... Good luck Mr. Phelps... KRITER01

Easy 5* as usual

the only think that was a turn OFF! was all the dancing and kissing at the new years party. I though what's next group sex? Was she horney from jeff or all the male attention? HOW DOES a set up for cheating equal romance???

reds

you love red haired women, dont you? so do I. I get nervous and tongue tied when around them.

BRILLIANT BRILLIANT BRILLIANT

just a great love story of two pals finding each other again years later....love stories like this....no cheating...no swinging...no lies....no one else involved....just the sweetest of love stories....LIFE IS GOOD....

I'm glad I found this little love story

and at the right time of the year.

thanks

Best story yet

I have read most of yours. Best of them so far. Made me cry.