All Comments on 'A Summer By The Lake'

I love your stories so it is with some trepidation that I mention the appropriate term. Some eminent domain actions do become imminent. Keep up with the great stories!

I thought your story was great. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.

I loved it.

Very subtle naming the daughter BB Jones.

Did I miss it, or what was the secret betweeb BB and the Judge?

Of course I have come to expect no less from this author! The only thing that could have made this story better is if our Heroine had not been barren. Anxiously awaiting another story from this fine author.

The story got a five from me but it is eminent domain, not imminent domain .

One ....the story ended

Two ....You have the ability to make a patient person immpatient!!!

Keep doing what you do I have enjoyed every single one of your stories..you are a masterful story teller

This is one of the best short stories I have read in years.

Thanks for sharing.

5 stars is not enough.. This story was fantastic. Congratulations for making an older man feel good again.

The long struggle to bring Sara to emotional stability had me worried and when her ex went off the deep end it left me worried about BB's future emotional stability. Other than that it was an ideal Romance. I even thought of asking if it was a true story????

I do have a few quibbles, though. First, and the one that bugs me most, Sara's character development was pretty sparsely described. She went from (justifiably) mistrustful and angry to sappy and lovestruck mostly offstage. We got to see the bonding with B.B. in great detail, but the actual romance was sparse. Also, we didn't get to see Sara standing up for herself very much, except when she was wrong about it early in the story. I'd like to have seen more of her as an actual character, rather than simply a Love Interest. Second, the Sapphire Diamond subplot was introduced and then dropped, like you cut it from the story without cutting out the setup. Which leads the the last complaint, the tensions and problems you set up were overcome just a little too magically. I know it's a fantasy, and I really appreciate happy endings, but I do like for the characters to have to work a little harder for them.

All in all a good story, but it could be a better one. Thanks for sharing it with us, and I look forward to more.

I enjoyed your uplifting story, it made me smile. Thanks.

Please write more as this one is awesome

One of the best ever!

Beautifully written. It's hard to write a story that's endearing and engaging without becoming saccharine, but you nailed it . Thanks so much and please keep writing. This is the best thing I've seen on Literotica in some time.

this is the best story I have ever read. thank you. please continue to write.

Loved it - 5

You truly have a gift for writing. The dialogue between BB and Harry was tremendous. Thanks Look forward to more of your work.

so you went from rushed to drawn out, boring drivel

Enjoyed the story, even though you missed a couple of things when you proof read it. ;). I still gave it a 5star rating. Thank you.

Anonymous, go find a quick fuck flick to jerk yourself off to..this story is great, the writer obviously has talent. qhml1, you did a great job of developing your characters, the situation, etc. Aside from the predictable "hero wasn't looking to be a hero, but has a shitload of money which helps everything, and friends in all the right places to dispatch any annoying assholes",...it was a nice storyline. Frankly, I like to read something on here that isn't endless orgasms or "Oh God, Oh God" or "Fuck me harder deeper faster!" or "You are my cumslut"... that crap just gags me.. only thing I can think of it, might have been good to tie into his trauma from getting shot, or the darker side of his past, including the political shenanigans that occurred in the first part of the story...that sort of power and influence doesn't just disappear in a puff of smoke...power brokers don't just go away, they are always lurking about, either to help or to hurt... might have been good to tie them into later parts of your story. Either way, good read!

Absolutely loved this story. One of the top in the catagory. Definately a 5. Now let's see you top it!

your story is very very good! keep up the good work!

A good writing style, that flowed smoothly. I've read a bit here, and very few others come close.

I would not be surprised if you also wrote professionally.

Thanks for writing, it was greatly appreciated. I really enjoyed it.

:)

A great read, with many surprises and a great ending! Almost surprised to find this romance story on Literotica vs. Readers Digest. If I have any questions about this loving tale, it would be the names Parker, Cook & the generous manner of HH. Five Stars all the way. The Bird

First I want to say there were some real moments to savor in the story & loved the character of BB & likewise her emotionally scarred mom learning to tryst & trust again. Strong visceral Intro with poison oak & frigid dash into lake. That being said the narrator was too good to be

Sir Galahad reincarnate needed a few chinks in his armor to be credible. He threw money to buy off the dragons that dared cast a shadow over plucky single mom & her progeny. Platinum rated credit card was the sword of choice over & over again. All too easy .

Some wonderful issues were raised like crass development enroaching on rural areas, single parent families subsisting from check to check, rural literacy & access to technology . I'm a fan of happy endings but the best ones come when the protagonists actually breaks a sweat , instead of cutting a check. ***

So there were a few mistakes and some of the details could have been fleshed out. But this is a story given to the readers for free. It is not a full length novel. Well worth 5stars.

A great story....

Save a few spelling issues, this is among the best I have read here. At a few moments the narration seemed hurried, but that is not uncommon while writing a long piece. I loved it, and did not have to think twice before giving a 5-star. You displayed assured mastery in how to build up a character--exemplified by Sarah. Incomparable stuff, this. I shall look to more from you.

A re-readable story.

In my opinion you deserve a 5 squared for a score.

You brought out the best in all of your characters. It is nice to have a lot of fresh mountain air to clear your head.

Thank you for this great story. I agreed with another anon that this is re-readable.

You are a gifted story-teller. When reading your writings, I see colors. Thanks for your time and for sharing your gift.

I quit after the first page. You really, truly need an editor. This is especially true as your character claims to be a top notch writer.

Great story. I think Archie Campbell said it best, "Money can't buy happiness, but if you have enough of it you can suffer the very best brand of misery..."

Thanks!

What can I say, but "your stories fill my heart with joy". keep writing you offset a lot of the dribble, revenge, and sadnes on this site. THANK YOU

Didn't want it to end, thanks for a great read

Reads like a novel, can't tell you how much I enjoyed it, please keep up the good work- it provides broad based entertainment to us all

Thanks,

Sam

but I won't nit pick about a good story.

Keep them coming and I will keepreading them.

I must have missed this story when it first came out. I was just searching my favorites when I saw this. Now I have missed some sleep but have had several smiles and some laughs and a good feelings to take me to sleep (likely pleasent dreams too?).

Thank you for a great read, appreciate your writing - OK it nots perfectly edited BUT its not like I am paying for it. Any errors were easy to get by and took nothing away from the writing!! I DID enjoying reading! 5 STARS!!!!

So as long as you keep writing I will keep reading!

Thank YOU!!!

When i first read boston to birmingham ,c i just knew you had it in you to break the top 10 in romance. This story is so heart warming and touching. Its like those sitcom finales that leave you feeling all warm and fuzzy. Amazing stuff! DONT STOP WRITING, if u do il track ur ip address. Find you and kill you. Im the annon who kept saying anna wasnt necessary in b to b. Love you brother.

Sooner read Nodey you are a crap writer

Really liked it... But I have to ask you this- did you take just a hint of inspiration from the Sophia series by Castlestone.. I'm not taking away anything from you for this fine work of writing but I did feel a lingering presence of that story in some parts (with the gender roles reversed though). Either ways, keep it up!..

I enjoyed it from start to finish. The opening scene was absolutely astounding, and you didn't let up till the very end!

I love a story that doesn't involve the man abusing the woman, and so many of the torrid sex marathons amount to that. So reading about HH and Sarah and BB was a blessed relief for me.

I encourage you to overlook the criticisms. I suspect that the people who seemed to be the most severely critical couldn't write a story this good if they tried for a lifetime. This is a wonderful story and you should be proud of it. I wish I could write this well.

Thank you for a great read, and for sharing it with us.

You continue to be the hot ticket on this site. Please keep blessing us by sharing your gift.

DP

that when I finished - I wished it didn't end so soon. Thanks for sharing.

While I enjoy reading the stories here and yours a lot! I don't post all that much! I enjoyed this one more then the rest of yours! Please keep writing these good ones!

wow is all i can say... Loved it :)

i love or like your stories

Thank You for sharing your talent with everyone! Please share more!!!

It's truly a pleasure to read such a well written, uplifting story with happy endings for all but the ex husband who was his own worst enemy. He persisted and finally succeeded in ruining his life. I also read all your comments on this story and am pleased I'm in such a large crowd. There were only a couple that seemed as though they were from people who might have been cell mates of the ex.

Now that was an easy 5 stars. Thank you.

Well written tale. Not sure how I missed this one.

Thx.

I like ur stories. Pl keep writting. Thanks

Great story, great ending! Thanks

Cheeky request? Since I'm giving five stars. Any chance of a story about B. B. ?

I found this story well thought out, however, there are typos... L.O.L., but they don't hurt the story! Loved the teenager! She is a character!

Sometimes I just can't sleep at night, reading this story didn't help. I just could not stop during the story. The plot was well done. The story just kept getting better as I got into the meat of it. Keep them coming.

Thanks for an enjoyable read!!!!

Great characters, great story. I couldn't put it down. It even confirms the old saying, "Dancers are the best lovers". Thank you for the entertainment

This story is one of my favorites, I'm telling all of my friends to read it, knowing them they'll all give it the 5 star rating it more then deserves. Maybe it will bump the story up a few pegs in the Hall of Fame. :-) I would also like to read a story following B.B.. :-D

This is a beautiful story. I often found myself with unshed tears. Thank you for this.

I just loved reading this story, I could not stop reading it, and I would like to say this, whatever happened to the ex husband of sarah, when he got out of the mental hospital after 2 years, I think you might have another story to come, with the ex husband and also with B.B. herself now, that she is older now. I would diffently like to read about her adventures in her life and get some updates on her parents(sarah and harry), and see how they are.

Very enjoyable.

it has made my day.

at one time, when you brought Harry Winston in story I thought Edward was getting some help from Sapphire Jade Diamond.

Great story

Just an excellent story, enough said!

First, let me tell you that is the first story of yours I have read and now I have to read everything you may have written.

I loved it and the characters; it's the fairy tale everyone needs. But...it is "eminent" domain, not imminent.

Thanks for a very enjoyable time and, please, keep writing.

L

Well I have found another writer, but you aren't good your great. What a fantastic story.

Best EVER!! This story Rocks!

really really good

I just finished the third read. It is a marvelous story, go line and good composition. I bet you old english teachers are proud of you.. Keep writing

I find it supremely entertaining that the self-proclaimed Druid demonstrates a clearer and more comprehensive understanding of the best and most basic concepts of Christianity than most people I've encountered who consider themselves devout and legitimate Christians.

On a slightly more simplistic note, damn fine read. Keep it up.

It brought smiles, tears, and a little laughter to me soul!!!! Keep up the GREAT WORK!!!

Please write the story of his ex, his investigation, and his shooting!!!

And he has a built in model. A very good story. Harry as the (almost) anonymous donor hit home for me. I have a whole list of donations to make if I ever find that lottery ticket.

Keep up the good work!

Again, you can write. Have anything published?

Oh my godddd!! That is the best i ever read on literotica!!! U shld write moreeee:)

Lot of sugar, little bit of spice and splash of vingar. Perfect

Enjoyed it from beginning to the end. The plot twisted and turned to the point I wasn't sure what the ending would be. As it turned out, it turned out best for all. Thanks for posting.

Probably the best short story I have ever read, certainly the best I've read on literotica. Thank you.

Whatever I can say, has probably been said by the 80 odd comments before me. All that is left for me is to say is Thank You. Thank you for writing this story. Thank you for sharing some of your incredible talent with us.

I am a sucker for a good romantic story. This one had enough trials to wonder if it would work out. This is the first of your stories I have read but it won't be the last.

I thoroughly enjoyed this story. I couldn't put it down. Thank you!

I've never commented on a story in the year or so that I've been on Literotica but this story absolutely blew me away! Loved it and it is definitely the best I've read on here. I wish there was a 6th star to rank it!

Many thanks.

Great concept, fresh idea! Almost cried when BB got the adoption papers!

He might not be the woman's ex, but he sure is a domineering, controlling jerk.

here is the similar stories category listed at the side at the end of their posting. You have 5 of my all time favorites there.

So obviously, you don't need me because others have found this story great. Few edits it could use but that would only be quibbling.

Thank you.

I've served in the military. I spent 23 years as a police officer and a volunteer firefighter. Parts of your story had me crying like a teenage girl. Thank you.

Funny romantic serious. A wonderful story well written and well told. 5*

I love this story! I have read it 10 times and I can't put it down! I love the scene of BB on the deck, BB destroying the kitchen, dancing and the motel, their proposal talk....actually every single word. This is one of my all time favorites! Please, please, please, please keep writing!

coated in choc caramal t----s

It had 'human 'characters ,and a little of every emotion thou it was mostly happy and had me in tears at some beautifully written and expressed parts .BB was a gem !

this story only needs 1 word to describe it "unbelievable"

I was having a truly awful day (maybe week) and this story cheered me right up. Thank you and please keep writing.

All the best, a loyal fan.

I consider this one of my favorite stories that I have read. Please keep stories like this coming. You are a very talented writer.

I truly enjoyed this story. Thanks for sharing it with us.

It is a feel good story. Nice

It's so nice to read a story that is happy-happy-happy. I really enjoyed this one. Your character B.B. is the best character I came across in a long, long time. I couldn't wait for her to make her appearances. She had the honesty and fun of youth. I have 3 sons and I wish I had a daughter like B.B. This just became one of my favorite stories. You are a wonderful writer. Keep it up.

but I was expecting to hear more from the Diamond Realty lady. The story hinted that we hadn't seen the last of her. Keep up the good work!

leave it to the folks from "Duck Dynasty" to say what I think about your work. happy-happy-happy, that is how I feel when I read your stories. THANKS