by bi_cathy
I vote for you to continue the game. Problem, now that mutual interest has been devulged a slow touch and tickle seduction seems counterproductive for readers.
There are females around who bikini trim because their lover likes them full and womanly. Media hype steers thinking into a Stepford Wife world of sameness. How totally vanilla that is.
I think it is a clever, funny, spicy story just like it is. I'd love to hear where it might end up, but I'm ok with it as is too!
please continue! I'd love to hear more from your characters. Well written
Your story is probably the first I've read that involved no sex that had me interested and cheering for the heroine. Not only was I imagining a playful ending, but I was almost more excited for her to admit her feelings to her friend. Thank you for such a non-standard erotic story.
lol...Loved it. You are right, this story can stand on it's own, BUT, I sure would love to see where this goes. So, could you please write a follow up? Pretty please with sugar on top?
It stands very well on its own but I wouldn't mind seeing a follow up if they did go gay for each other.
I would like to see a version with far more flesh surrounding this basic skeleton.
Best Regards,
This could definitely stand on its own. However, I feel like you're teasing us by ending it so abruptly. Please write a second chapter. Thanks!
It would be wrong because .... , well just because. Sequels so rarely work, Further pursuit of this wonderful story and characters would undercut the integrity and organic development won to this point. It would make me so mad if you were to violate our unspoken, pact so quit while you are ahead.
This is not some lame reverse psychology ploy. Well maybe it is . No ! I mean ...the potential dilution of this saga-être will speed up global warming according to my top secret calculations that I can't show you for your own good. So no sequel because I said so.
If you persist in this potential folly and California gets hit by another earthquake, you will be liable . I will personally see forfeit the puter ' you wrote the sequel on with my super powers invested in me due to hidden clause in Patriot Act.
Sincerely- your Newest no. 1 fan
LSD
Chapter 2 please you CAN'T leave it like that PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE with a cherry on top!!!!!
you kinda have to write another chapter ;)
PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE !
PLEASE write the next chapter! I'm wet just from the anticipation of what could happen next!
Please you simply must write the next chapter! Please I will love you forever if you do.
Your writing is an object lesson for all authors on this site. Nowhere is the difference between an erotic story and a story related to sex better demonstrated than in your stories, and yours seem to be so effortlessly and truly erotic. I really don't care if there is a Chapter 2, but please, please keep posting your gems. Thank you
My heart just started having palpitations. Amazingly written. Just exceptional.
your build-up is amazing. it's erotic without even a kiss. please continue as fast as you can :) you're a person of great talent!
oh wow awesome i love that! i hope you continue this story,when you think of it there`s a lot of substance and promise underneath the title.tnx bi_cathy..(cinder)
The title says it all. I join the choir begging for more. It's really a pretty stock fantasy but your writing made it come alive in a quite believable way. Great job. (And your celeb choices - right on the money, especially the stunning Stana Katic.)
This was just so good... You have to write more, I can see this developing so sensually. Please write more
A truly great story. What MAN doesn't want to think about two women and at least get to watch.
I liked the way you have set about the story. You have certainly given us a taste of what is to come. Pardon the pun.
hell no,this is a lesbian story.ok we get it they have boyfriends.but its a big fucking turn on to add the men when they try to get close and stuff.no i wouldnt read this,at least not in the lesbian section,if u feel like writing more do it,but in another section.Thank you.u write well i wont argue on that,but its not what i wanted to read on this section and u completely turned me off right now.keep on writing. just dont confuse the sections
you should write more and continue this story. most enjoyable.. thanks.
This brief story was terrific & I'm sure some other writer's might be saying: "Why didn't I think of that??"
The male / female conversation back & forth just seemed to pull the reader in to his or hers own thoughts about the discussion.
This is a good writer's mind working !!
I don't usually give a 5 star to a one pager, but this one was unusually good !!
This is one of the best stories I've found pn Literotica in a long time; and it's become one of my favorts. Please wrtie a sequel for this story where they actually 'go gay' for one another. Please! I would really like to see how it would all fall out.
I think you should keep going with the story, I mean you've already got the plot set up. It seames like you really thought it out. If your stuck a good plot twist for you it that maybe the boyfriends catch the girls in action. Then again maybe not whatever you write I'm sure it will be just fine.
Continue this story immediately please! It's fantastic already
You've got me! Hook, Line AND sinker! You must continue. I couldn't tear my eyes away from reading that. VERY well put together. Awesome plot and something to keep me and everyone else on the edge of their seats!
I've read this like 4 or 6 times already, really hope you can continue !!! It'd be very hot and exciting
You really need to write more of this! By the way, huge castle fan so Stana Katic being first really is awesome, I agree, I'd go gay for her. But really, this needs a second part, it's too good
Seriously, I've had you on my favorites list for what seems like forever, and I frequently check back to see if there's anything new from your keyboard. I love the tone of your stories (although I often wish you'd let us peek at the denouement and not just the deeply emotional run-up - is it too private?)
Please. Write more.
Now I really want to see Chapter 02. Please. They both want it now and they both realize it.
I think a second story would be so hot. I would love to read it, but its not necessary. It's really a perfect end. And such a turn on. But if you ever feel inclined to pen part 2, I'll read in a heartbeat.
yes please. i love your writing. the characters are so real. i'd like to see what these two do, now that their little secret is out in the open.
C'mon we've all waited long enough. You can't just start something and leave. Please continue :(
This had the possibility of something good but the Author chose to screw it up by not even a teaser. No action, no interest.
Sometimes less is more, my imagination worked overtime after finishing this! Keep up the great work.
It takes astonishing skill to write as artfully as this. The apparent ease is deceptive. Every word and every paragraph has been carefully arranged and polished. The theme is thoughtful and thought-provoking. And in terms of technical craftsmanship, this one-page wonder is flawless! I am so glad that you ultimately decided to pick up the story line and develop it.
You can't leave it like that come on give us more, go to write at least one more and tell us what happens with Kate and our mystery guest.
How could a group of men and women sit around talking about hot, sexy women, and nobody mentioned Jessica Alba?
I'm a heterosexual, married woman, and I'd go gay for Jessica Alba!
Still gave you five stars, though!
I keep coming back to reread this. It’s so.. cute, innocent, very well put together. Definitely my style I love it.
Such a treat, just discovered you, this is the sort of writing I love, very sensual and lots if back story. Clever believable plots, why aren't you in the hall of fame I say. Will comment as much as I can as I work my way through your previous work. Thank you
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This is so sweet and delicious, I can't wait to read the other installments and see how she reassures—and hopefully incorporates—Kate's love.
Smile .... Yeah two female gorgeous enchanting beings in sensual harmony is the most extraordinary beauty ..... Because its not about FUCKING its about ENJOYING ...... Graceful ...... Wonderful ideA
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Love this so much. So thrilling, so teasing, so erotic. Less really is more sometimes.