Bag Lady & the Retired Marine Ch. 04

The story continues

So Susan has come out of the woodwork, love it.

getting better!

Sorry that you & I got off on the wrong foot! I didn't mean to sound so profoundly negative about your writing style, I was just sounding off with my frustration about it taking so long to get to the point of kicking their asses! As for my reading habits, I don't read just for the porn content & stroke factor (My lady & I get that taken care of quite nicely thank you). In fact, I think the writers of a lot of the so called "stroke stories" have a background of literary training consisting of bathroom walls (reading & writing on them), IMO. Also, so far no camels have attempted crapping on my head. I guess you do have some clout higher up in the food chain (LOL).

There was one comment about you possibly recruiting for the Marines, too late for me. I am a Marine!

I'm sorry that you've had such a rough time of it, may it get much better for you from here on out!

I just love it..............

.................when a writer inserts him/herself into a story. To me that says the writer has some real intentions of a great story, or they wouldn't do something like this. I've enjoyed what I've read so far and am certainly looking forward to more to cum here.

Thanks for sharing.

Just as I suspected

You were writing yourself--or a lot of yourself--into this story and I guess that is why I found the first chapters a bit depressing but well written and clearly worth 5 stars.
Now things are looking up and I look forward with pleasure to the coming chapters.

Well Well

That provides a bit of understanding. Look forward to more.....Thanks

interesting Dave

The story is good and going slowly but Dave is great and the fight was good.Dave is really sweet and every woman would love Dave.the bag lady name need not be your's.

Enjoying this very much

Having been homeless for 7 months in the woods years ago I can appreciate this story.
Thank you for sharing.

Thank you

Susan you are awesome!

waiting to read more

The story is really good with Dave fighting.I envy his fighting skills and the training is very rigorous and hard and his regular practice.Such a Marine can hit 10 guys with guns and knives.Dave is very brave and good and has taken good care of the suffering bag lady.This is nice and waiting to read more

Much better.

I like this chapter much better then the last two which were a little hard for me to follow. You seem to be heading into a really good story and I will look forward to the next chapters.

Good start to a promising novel.

To bad Dave didn't leave the three much more blooded and all singing soprano.

lol sjp, you go 5 to 55 in 0.6 seconds!

this is such a great story! I'm so glad for Dave and Susan. And Dave that little stinker...he's a closet horndog! But what I really like about him is he's keeping it in check and is showing Susan only the greatest of respect...what a man!

It just builds and builds. I'm falling in love with you Susan, just the way that Dave is!

Thanks For Some*****

Good reading keep them coming.

no stars ?

I try to rate everything I read on this site but when I got to the end of this segment there were no stars to rate it

Yup, no stars to be seen. Here, take these 5*...

Five

well deserved comment

I think that there are no stars to rate this chapter because it deserves more. Astonishing and easily believable. I hope you are and wish you well.

yeah take my 5 stars also...

i dont need them and you deserve them for this awesome series

Please may I give you 5 stars?

The chapter begins with the much anticipated fireworks, describes a second even more dramatic event, and settles in to an almost tension free late night dinner.
btw, I loved the name usage. Dave talking to and about himself. TBBT assuming an even more significant nom de plume.
kudos