Nurse's Aide

A truly feel good story

Wouldn't it be great if every disabled guy, especially vets, could have a nurse like this.
I'd like to hear more of what happened before the parents returned.

Very poorly written

First, the ampersand isn't an acceptable substiture for 'and' the way you've used it here. Too many occurrences.

Next, you need to pick a tense and stay with it. Flip flopping is lazy.

Third, either use dialog or don't; but this weird mixture is off-putting.

Finally, this was just too clinical. No passion in it. Maybe had it been written better... Ah, well.

You really need an editor.

Disabled sexuality

Thank you for this story. I'm disabled myself, although not as much as Mike. I've found rhat many able bodied people assume that disabled people are not able to have sex and are not interested in it. Please continue this story line.

"brake" not "break"

love the theme but agree needs work

okay first i love i good virgin story and the point of view from a disabled person is not often written about, so maybe that could become your genre, writting about the sexual encounters of different types of disabled people. become their voice.

however i agree with the points made before, you do need a bit of help bringing your stories to life but im sure that will come with time and lots of practise, i look forward to more of your work x

how disabled was he he seems to not be able to use his arm like he his paralized from the neck down ,yet he can move his hips during sex and even get it up. from my expierence in the med field people with total parapligia are unable to feel anything below the neck including genital nerves