All Comments on 'Blowjob Universe'

This story was immensely amusing and a turn on. More please ;)

Really great story, simple, direct, and really really hot, please for the love of god post more!!

The problem is you switched from 3rd person to 2nd person halfway through the story and I found that very distracting.

Example: " With complete disregard to Kristi's well-being you shove the struggling girl's face all the way down your dick, burying your swollen cockmeat deep in her throat as it starts to shoot jizz into Kristi's stomach."

" "What! I'm dead! Well....." David thought of how shitty real life had been

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If you can fix that, I think you have an otherwise very promising series.

let us see what happens next, please

You must continue the series! Make more!!!!!

Is there anything more pedantic than someone who is unable to enjoy an erotic tale due to a change from 2nd to 3rd person? I notice they always remain anonymous too. get a life!

Great story hun!

The reason that I switched from 3rd to 2nd person so much is because this is my story over at chyoo (which actually works with literotica, but they are not connected in a convenient way for some reason) where each page is a different thread. Because of this, it switches between 2nd and 3rd person more often than it would if I was just writing a straight up story.

My apologies, but I thought it would be decent enough anyways.

Seriously, don't worry about it. I was a bit too enthralled with reading one of the greatest smut stories I've ever seen too notice it at all. This story was incredible, and I implore you, kind sir, to write more. For the sake of humanity.

Nice. Love a good sloppy bj. And the idea of a regular world, but with every woman having an oral fixation! Would be great to see him re-visiting old acquaintances (and repaying some grudges perhaps)?

Just read the rest of this on chyoo. Came hard. Mother daughter scene was epic. For the love of bjs write more! Noticed he still hasn't taken Kristi up on her comment of choking a girl to unconsciousness yet...

Yeah I keep trying to submit my second story but it's being denied for some dumb reason. Also, please add on to the chyoo version, that's why its there.

I can't wait to try and add on to the story. I actually tried already, but I messed up the plot a bit (which I apologize for) so I had an idea for a branch near the beginning of the story. I'm just waiting on getting my regular computer back to write it up.

http://chyoa.com/story/blowjob-universe/

hey this was awesome could you please continue this series I am really enjoying it!