... story, and it doesn't get better with the retelling
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Anonymous04/03/13
Personal Touch.....
I've read several of your stories. A few grammatical errors I think you would catch if you read the sentences to yourself. Also, I would be able to identify with the characters better if you give a description of everyone. And of course the leading characters should be gorgeous and sexy.
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Anonymous05/20/14
A pathetic pair of commentators
This a quietly funny and quite charming story. Heaven knows why one commentator chose to be negative and the other went all pedantic. Just enjoy!
Yet again folk seem to prefer to read these works while carrying on like a picky school teacher.
More interested in the method than the story.
I really don't know why they bother.
Having read many of your works in the 'first time' genre, I must check some of the other offerings from such a prolific author.
The second or third of your stories I've read and they are charming, carefree and funny whilst making me frisky. After being a passive consumer on this website since I was an internet child a decade ago, I've made an account, my first comment (this) and am committed to reading your work in its entirety. I completely disagree with the commenter who complained about the lack of descriptions or story - this means that you can fill in your own images and background into your humorous, sexy conumdrums. Wonderful! I love that they often take place secluded and in nature but I wish for myself you were from NYC. Thanks for the reading material for break now I'm going to ace this dissertation
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Same old, same old ...
... story, and it doesn't get better with the retelling
Personal Touch.....
I've read several of your stories. A few grammatical errors I think you would catch if you read the sentences to yourself. Also, I would be able to identify with the characters better if you give a description of everyone. And of course the leading characters should be gorgeous and sexy.
A pathetic pair of commentators
This a quietly funny and quite charming story. Heaven knows why one commentator chose to be negative and the other went all pedantic. Just enjoy!
Another example.
Yet again folk seem to prefer to read these works while carrying on like a picky school teacher.
More interested in the method than the story.
I really don't know why they bother.
Having read many of your works in the 'first time' genre, I must check some of the other offerings from such a prolific author.
Inspiring
The second or third of your stories I've read and they are charming, carefree and funny whilst making me frisky. After being a passive consumer on this website since I was an internet child a decade ago, I've made an account, my first comment (this) and am committed to reading your work in its entirety. I completely disagree with the commenter who complained about the lack of descriptions or story - this means that you can fill in your own images and background into your humorous, sexy conumdrums. Wonderful! I love that they often take place secluded and in nature but I wish for myself you were from NYC. Thanks for the reading material for break now I'm going to ace this dissertation
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