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by virago92012/20/12

unfinished

is the rest of the story coming. you have a 2 star stand alone or the first page start of a 4star+ story

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by mcollect12/20/12

You need to finish this!

Please continue this story it needs a conclusion!

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by Formbdy2k201112/20/12

Need More

It was a good story that left me looking for more. You didn't finish.

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by AlspethDelArbol12/22/12

Form the author . . .

Thanks for the feedback! I appreciate you all taking the time to write and giving me some new ideas. for me, the story was done after Sean helped Marie achieve her first orgasm, but now you have me contemplating what would happen next if their story continued . . .

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by jpz007ahren12/25/12

Very good

It's fine to keep it as is. Beautiful scene, well written. More can be fun but this story doesn't need it.

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by eWoman12/28/12

Great scene...

and I agree with jpz007ahren. It's pretty much perfect as is. But, if you decide on more -- I'll certainly be reading. Take care...

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by Anonymous02/23/15

Just the right amount of buildup...

This story is super hot!

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