this is a good first story and being its ch.01 you have more to come. Continue writing
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Anonymous12/20/12
Total Crap
Fucking rubbish
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Anonymous12/21/12
Ignorant Comments
Please ignore the ignorant comment from the previous idiot. These are people who can't write and just think it is clever to write harsh words.
I like the angle you are coming from and would encourage you to continue.
I love constructive criticism. This is not misfiled...it's about a niece and her uncle, who happens to be African-American...as stated he married into their family; and their developing sexual attraction/acts. Leave many more even if you hate it!!! I've just started writing erotica!!!
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Anonymous12/26/12
Give me some older mature black cock
that was a clever writing I'm sure many were thinking a young white girl developing into a full grown woman was about to get a taste of an older and experienced big black...keep writing it's looking good..
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Anonymous12/30/12
Good start and I like where this is going. It has interracial elemebts along with taboo. Can't please everyone.
Sugar sugar!
this is a good first story and being its ch.01 you have more to come. Continue writing
Total Crap
Fucking rubbish
Ignorant Comments
Please ignore the ignorant comment from the previous idiot. These are people who can't write and just think it is clever to write harsh words.
I like the angle you are coming from and would encourage you to continue.
more
:) please
Interracial is the category, this is misfiled
This is misfiled--inter-racial is the category
Not bad
good start, pay no mind to jackass commenter. They have no purpose.
Thanks everyone!!!
I love constructive criticism. This is not misfiled...it's about a niece and her uncle, who happens to be African-American...as stated he married into their family; and their developing sexual attraction/acts. Leave many more even if you hate it!!! I've just started writing erotica!!!
Give me some older mature black cock
that was a clever writing I'm sure many were thinking a young white girl developing into a full grown woman was about to get a taste of an older and experienced big black...keep writing it's looking good..
Good start and I like where this is going. It has interracial elemebts along with taboo. Can't please everyone.
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