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by Anonymous

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by Anonymous12/17/12

WHILE SOME MAY TEETER

so others can totter, TK U MLJ LV NV

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by erectus12312/23/12

physics

fluid dynamics are an integral part of sex, and mechanic also- nice to see your comments (5)

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by butters12/17/13

nicely balanced and

balance is everything, and so long as the poet weighs their words so will readers.

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by tazz31712/17/13

BUT....WHAT IF THE PIVOT IS ALTERED

the two sitters will fall to their behindsl TK U MLJ LV NV

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by Desejo12/17/13

Well done

I like what you did with the first line.
The second I like a lot less - it's wordy and I don't think you need it (even visually).
Consider changing "your mind" in the final line to "the mind" only because it gives a more generic advice/scientific feel. I like this though.

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