Uncertain Justice

Break it up next time

55 pages too much to read through at 1 time didn't even try after saw how long this was

WELL worth the read

I have to say once I started it I read it through in on sitting totally spellbinding and full of pitfalls and twists and turns

Great Story

Glad to see a new story from you. I just wish you had broken it up into multiple parts.

Boyd Percy

A GREAT STORY

depicting what happens when justice gets out of control. TK U MLJ LV NV

#2 THIS AUTHOR HAS PENNED A GOOD STORY

Lamour and Harte and Woodman all have a new contempory, TK U MLJ LV NV

good read

read it the whole way thru in one sitting.I liked it!

I Hate Superlatives !

.... well the " unjustified " superlatives. This was a fantastic read ( though not a great story, later for that ) . I LOVED the choicest parts of John Grisham- David Morrel- Jack London and Tony Hillerman skills all blended in one reading experience. If only Harrison Ford was 25 years younger for movie deal !

The euphoria level following a sublime Literotica experience places this effort in the top three. Only ' Seperate Vacations by DQS & 'Requital' by an author whose name slips from memory, due to reader exhaustion compare. I will allow a few solitary nitpicks and say the minute time DA Brady inept local skullduggery and his rapid ascent in Department of Justice Pantheon beggered belief.

What were the papers that he burned anyway that were carried back from initial Presidential liàson? I was waiting for the big reveal that never quite came. Is Brady still drooling on himself or did he get carted off to one of those cushy Club Fed penal resorts ? Nitpicking minds want to know !

I'll reread the pertinent. passages, perhaps the fault is mine, but there was so much ( quality ) ground covered. That being said I can't begin to number the positive aspects without losing count. The grizzly bear sortie and assists from phantoms centuries past jump to the front of the line though .

One last gentle rebuke for anyone who has complaints about the voluminous number of chapters and wanted to be spoon fed the chapters or have them pared down. For the record I loved all the machinations from the outdoor to Washington D.C. level.

Maybe just maybe, this was a bit of slow burn intro but Longhorn_07 has the goodwill banked to see initial plod through as befits a HOF author. Sure enough with the onset of the rain storm, the story achieved lift off. It's been a long time between submissions, but it's clear now this author has not been slacking. Best Literotica Christmas gift ever !

Mea Culpa !

A reread shows that the incinerated papers at DAs house was the Mile's case file & not some presidential conspiracy evidence. Although the Lone Gunman / X-files enthusiast in me says that would have explained Brady's obsession with framing Miles a lot more credibly then a petty vendetta with M.'s defense attorney.

The massive cover up hinted a bigger underlying motivation perhaps related to what lead character might have seen in Afghanistan or time in service. At least the wannabe novelist within me thought.

Excellent work...read the story in one sitting...captivating....

Excellent work...read the story in one sitting...captivating...

Superb

I read it in one sitting as well and I'm glad you left it as one story. It's wonderful to see you writing again and his story is incredibly well done! Thanks so much for putting forth the time and effort spent on this masterpiece. I look forward to your next submission.

unbelievable!!

Read it in one sitting & wouldn't have had it any other way! One of my favorite authors, and after reading this you should be able to tell why. Glad to see you back!
5 big healthy stars!!

Thanks for returning

I had just read your 7 stories on another site, I allow myself to read them once every couple of years. This one is great. Thank you for writing for us. Now if Beermaker would make a return....

This has been some

incredible story.
calibeachgirl

don't listen to them!

true, 55 pages is a long read, and in my case took a couple of days. But bless you for having the whole story there for us, rather than doling out a page or two a week/month.
Great job! loved his awareness of nature, and guidance from the People.
Thank you

It was a very enjoyable day long read....

So glad to have a story from one of the best. Hope you don't keep us waiting so long. Thanks for a very well planned and executed adventure.

awesome

The best read in a long time....thanks

WONDERFUL!!!

I was so glad to find that you had written a new story after so long an absence since I'm a big fan of all of your stories. This is as professional a story as any that are sold at Barnes & Noble and hope that you will continue writing more frequently.

Second Best

As per the rest, Great Story.
Could have explained more about the love life and their ending up together.
second best only because "separate lives" is my all time favorite!

Hooray!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

You're back!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

The Master is Back!

Wow! The master is back and his work is better than ever. This is a cross between The Fugitive and Dancing With Wolves that makes a powerful political statement. Longhorn, I am so happy you finally found something new to say and chose to share it with us!

I read the story in one sitting and was glad to have the entire novel available to me so I could enjoy the entire work. It was highly compelling, professional quality, and is one of the best stories on this site. I highly recommend this. I look forward to the hardcopy version and to the movie. It's that good!

Drudgery at times, couldn't scroll the pages fast enough at others...

... but, all in all, a good piece of work. Thought the characters of Kehoe and Linda could have been expanded. Both were barely introduced before being pretty much discarded. Anyway, I'm not going to critize too much because I did stick around for all 55 pages.

Wow

Nice to know that you are still here. That is gong to be at least a weekender. Thank you. Jim

One hell of a yarn!

A huge amount of work went into this story - well done and keep up the good work!

Tied up my weekend.

An amazing read. Would make a great plot for a movie. Thanks longhorn. Keep up the fine work.

outstanding story.

I have read this story twice now and will again. it is that good. this would make a
great movie.

Very enjoyable

I loved the story, it was a cross between woodmanone's western writing and drksideofthemoon's mystic indian writing. I hope you continue writing its been too long since you posted.

Extremely Well Done.

It does sound like a hymn to Libertarianism but it is written to hold you and give you a strong emotional response. The people in the Gov seem to have real problems, but real people have the same problems!

Magnificent

What a piece of writing this story is. With a story of this length it is easy to lose your audience but you have managed to keep us inthraled all the way through. Truly wonderful written tale wish there were more than 5 stars to give as it deserves them

awesome

I have never posted a public comment. This is just an amazing story. Thank You.

First Blood echoes aside

This is a great tale and i will be reading this over and over again. Nicely done, *tipping cap salute*

good read

every time I read this I like it better

Well Worth The Wait

Try not to make us wait so long next time!

5*

wow

I enjoyed that, thank you
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Yep WOW

I almost ran away from a 55 page story -

But I didn't - it was great and the movie would be better -

You had to the Presidential pardon route or there would never be an end - nice work though.

I am glad Linda went home with him -

Glad to see you back

I hope to see more of your work soon.

I loved this one, I could see this being made into a mini-series.

Good Story, needs work

I commend your effort and it was a good story. For me it was too much detail (two pages to describe how the log jam happened). Main crit is often a change in character, scene happened without notice until many paragraphs into it.

Shame on you!

I had promised myself to get 4 or 5 hours of writing in today, but I started your story and just couldn't stop. Sure as hell didn't want to. Brilliant, as to be expected from one of the finest writers on this site, if not the finest. Wonderful to see you writing again.

Thanks.

Outstanding Yarn

A truly outstanding work ... thank you so much for your efforts to put this story together. As a resident of Bexar County, I have to say your story gave me a few chills. (I'm totally unrelated to the legal and political segments of our community.) I really had a hard time putting this story aside to attend to real life.

BTW - VERY glad you are writing again -

I apologize for not including that before - it is a pleasure to see you back and writing -

One of the best action stories ever posted.

Extremely well researched and written. This is my second reading and I enjoyed this one even better than the first. Thanks for a delightful and entertaining story.

Very real about officials

I know many by name and action that make the DA in this story look like a boy scout.
We do not have anyone to fight. Therefore all I can I will do. PRAY FOR OUR COUNTRY.

A welcomed return with a bang

No pun intended.

Really, it is great to have you writing again and I hope you continue to do so. I have been finding more and more stories on this site that definitely do not fit into the self-gratification class and yet I think it has be for the benefit of the site and the readers. THANK YOU!

A wonderful story. Stayed up until 4:15 AM to finish it and engrossed 'til the last word.

What a film this would make, I do hope it is discovered by the right people, sure would love to see it produced Thank You

Cliff hanger

Kept me reading fo two days

good!

Really enjoyed it. Could not put it down.

Let's See...

Page 10, he went to the prosecutor's home --- the guy who manufactured evidence to put him away "It's nothing personal" --- and read all the evidence, EVERYTHING about how the case was built against him, and he then waited until the prosecutor come home, had some conversation with the man, who was determine to burn his own papers right away, to get rid of the evidence he's been building and HIDING, manufactured evidence that'd send out "hero" to prison for years, an imprisonment that guarantee him being used as "fresh meat" by giant steroid taking convicts....

But our "hero" managed to allow Brady, the prosecutor, to get a whole bunch of cash, throw them all over the floor, get his own little gun from the drawer, SHOT himself and what did our "hero" do? He ran out of that place screaming like a little girl... and went on the run, from page 10 to dozens of more pages, a run that included him kidnaping at least TWO Colorado police officers, with him saying to them:

"Don't worry, I am not gonna hurt you, if you do what I say and keep your hands up... I just don't wanna go to prison for something I didn't do..." and triggered a gaint man-hunt for him for WEEKS, with the recuperating prosecutor managing to once and for all getting rid of all the manufactured evidence he had in his home files, when he burn his own place down... with everything, of course, being blamed on our hero... because Brady, the prosecutor, would merely cheery pick the information he'd give, or not give, to the police, when they interview him about the "killer" -- Miles -- who had shot him and burn his home down in the process... with the media all reporting about it... and 55 long, Lit pages later, our "hero" is gonna come out triumph?

I mean, is THAT the story here... and this "hero" of ours... this guy was in the Army for over 20 years?

Longhorn__07 is one of my top 5 or so writers in Lit... but no one saw anything wrong with this scenario, as an intelligent plot, for an ADULT READERSHIP... by an author as good at writing as Longhorn__07?

I never mind the length of the stories Longhorn___07 and a few other great authors churn out... But the story, the PLOT anyway, is FUCKING STUPID! It hurts my head, when I have to deal with characters as mind numblingly stupid as this moron, Miles here.

Now, I wouldn't have to stop and write like this, if the AUTHOR simply allow our "hero" to just keep driving, running away from Texas... wandering aimlessly, without any concrete plans... but he allowed this moron to BREAK INTO THE PROSECUTOR's home, read the whole fucking file and saw the manufactured evidence against him and EVEN HAD A GOOD CONVERSATION with the bad guy, Brady, the prosecutor who's PERSECUTING him, our "hero" --- "It's nothing personal, Miles..." --- and all he did was just ran out of Brady's home, screaming like a little girl.... after Brady shot himself with his little hand-gun... and then REALLY GO ON THE RUN, for WEEKS.... an on-the-run adventure that, again, included kidnapping police in other states?

LOLLLLL!

I mean, can we, ADULTS, have entertaining stories AND some semblance of intelligence at the same time? Surely, someone as good as Longhorn__07 could do that, no?

I was ready to spend some good hours reading this long story, especially after I read all the comments at the end of the story... but I just couldn't continue reading around the 16-17th page... and it's a shame, since this was the only one the great Lit writer Longhorn__07 wrote in the last a couple years...

Awsome Story! !!!!

Yes, in deference to the previous comment, the protagonist was obviously not thinking clearly when confronted with the prosecutor's misconduct. So what happened? He defaulted to his original plan. Part of what built believability into the character was his ability to make mistakes. For me, I really disliked the death of the puppy. Though it was written in a believable manner, I came close to jettisoning the story at this point despite the riveting action. (My issue though) The use of Old Zeb and the People as a means honing and enhancing his awareness and survival skills was both ingenious and smacks of someone who has either spent time alone in the wilderness or has done at least a fair amount of research.

Longhorn_7, thankyou for a great read! If you aren't already published, I'd be surprised. If you truly aren't, get you to a publisher and include this one with your CV!

WOW!

I'm exhausted. Couldn't put it down. Masterful development of an engaging and original theme.

I particularly liked the People and old Zeb. They appeared so casually. The author did not go to extremes to explain their existence. They just appeared naturally and immediately made sense. Without them, the story would have lost a lot of its zing.

I hope we don't have to wait so long for another story from this gifted story teller.

wow

more then worth the read. even thought this might be a published work. thank you so much for your time and energy putting this together. I won't forget this story for a long time. :)