So he wants to fuck her because of his obsession with her. And she wants to fuck him because ...? She is happily (?) married with a baby on the way, and with no reason or justification she returns his advances?
Maybe this will explained in another chapter (if there is one) but for just this story, this is poor characterization.
left us in the dark with to many unanswered questions . did not vote
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Anonymous03/26/13
sisterlove
Awesome!Awesome!U can feel the love existing between the brother and his sister!!When there is incest, sweet love between both siblings MUST ABSOLUTELY exists!However the story should continue,it cannot end like this.It leaves us on our hunger!I cannot wait for a second chapter!Plse write it quickly.Thks.
Twilight of Siblings Love Ch. 01: Danny and Anna (Brother and Sister)
It appears Anna, Danny's sister, has only empathy for him; she has expressed no love, as in man and woman. The minimal foreplay and eventual coupling did not have the passion that an intense, deep love should have; in fact, Anna lay in bad with her back to him as he exited her bedroom, he said, "I love You", to her; she gave him no response whatsoever! She got married, she said, "because I was lonely", after his tour began in the Middle East and three months after getting married she is pregnant! Danny needs to move on; his love-interest pursuit of his sister is useless and futile!! Unless...she suddently becomes "single" by either divorce, abandoment, death, annulment, etc. Of course, unless the Writer/Author has plans to give us an additional chapter or two, we readers won't know anything about any future for them.
English
great story
Please write a second chapter.
why no editor?
you really need to use a good editor before posting. the best thing you can do is delete and rewrite after you go back to school and learn.
too one-sided
So he wants to fuck her because of his obsession with her. And she wants to fuck him because ...? She is happily (?) married with a baby on the way, and with no reason or justification she returns his advances?
Maybe this will explained in another chapter (if there is one) but for just this story, this is poor characterization.
So, I like it very much.
Cinco Estrellas!
left us in the dark with to many unanswered questions . did not vote
sisterlove
Awesome!Awesome!U can feel the love existing between the brother and his sister!!When there is incest, sweet love between both siblings MUST ABSOLUTELY exists!However the story should continue,it cannot end like this.It leaves us on our hunger!I cannot wait for a second chapter!Plse write it quickly.Thks.
Twilight of Siblings Love Ch. 01: Danny and Anna (Brother and Sister)
It appears Anna, Danny's sister, has only empathy for him; she has expressed no love, as in man and woman. The minimal foreplay and eventual coupling did not have the passion that an intense, deep love should have; in fact, Anna lay in bad with her back to him as he exited her bedroom, he said, "I love You", to her; she gave him no response whatsoever! She got married, she said, "because I was lonely", after his tour began in the Middle East and three months after getting married she is pregnant! Danny needs to move on; his love-interest pursuit of his sister is useless and futile!! Unless...she suddently becomes "single" by either divorce, abandoment, death, annulment, etc. Of course, unless the Writer/Author has plans to give us an additional chapter or two, we readers won't know anything about any future for them.
tender and loving
will you add more chapters...Does she love her husband?
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