The enjambment was well done. I usually don't care much for the erotic poems here, but this was really good.
I am sure the brain is not involved TK U MLJ LV NV
the first lines are great, perhaps drop detail of career to make more universal,and suggest more in final line, there a little mysterious detail would add- gave it a 5-
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