It would help to use quotation marks (" ") to separate the dialogue from the rest of the wording. The storyline or plot was good and erotic, but the story was a little hard to follow.
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The story is a little hard to read.
It would help to use quotation marks (" ") to separate the dialogue from the rest of the wording.
The storyline or plot was good and erotic, but the story was a little hard to follow.
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