HE'S 27 YEARS OLD, AND STILL AT HOME WITH MOMMY. HE FUCKS HER EVERY WEEKEND, WHY IS THIS FOOL LEAVING A SURE THING?? KNOCK HER UP AND START TO LIVE. BEFORE IT'S NOT TO LATE . IT'S NOT A BAD STORY,BUT HAS IT'S FLAWS. .............LAROC OF AGES
I like the idea, it had potential but need more. It lacked substance. In short it was a good idea but rushed. There had to be more to why she decided to give that to him. There had to be more to why he was leaving. There wasn't any explanation if he currently has a daughter and thinking of doing this if he gets a daughter. In short lacked substance.
I don't mind a short story and many are executed quite well; this one was not.
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WHAT A FLASHBACK !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
HE'S 27 YEARS OLD, AND STILL AT HOME WITH MOMMY. HE FUCKS HER EVERY WEEKEND, WHY IS THIS FOOL LEAVING A SURE THING?? KNOCK HER UP AND START TO LIVE. BEFORE IT'S NOT TO LATE . IT'S NOT A BAD STORY,BUT HAS IT'S FLAWS. .............LAROC OF AGES
I'd Call Waste Management
To haul this fucking garbage out of here. Absolute rank drivel, mind numbing shit!
I don't get it
I like the idea, it had potential but need more. It lacked substance. In short it was a good idea but rushed. There had to be more to why she decided to give that to him. There had to be more to why he was leaving. There wasn't any explanation if he currently has a daughter and thinking of doing this if he gets a daughter. In short lacked substance.
I don't mind a short story and many are executed quite well; this one was not.
I don't understand why he would ever leave her
It's too bad that he didn't get her pregnant, and that way he'd have a wife and children that would be the family the wanted.
I feel sorry for his mom, losing not only her son, but her lover too.
Perhaps another chapter is needed to explain why he is leaving.
Thanks for the good read
Need MORE!!!
Would love a fallow up of Ronald having his daughter on her 18th birthday maybe even letting his mother have a taste as well.
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