by Exeltus
A very nice read i hope that you can pick this enchanting tale up again. I would love to see the character build up of the both protagonists
The plot got a little better by the end, but the story is moving so slowly it is hard to stay interested. The succubus is still to easily controlled by her master.
love it, pacing is fine but too short, try releasing longer parts or release them sooner.
I like the concept, this story has great potential, I wonder how the paladin will get her into the order, will she ever transform into something other than a succubus(like a siren or valkarie)
The story of how the palladin finally tames her heart along with her already enslaved body will be a good read.
They could have good adventures together, I wonder if they'd ever meet the demon queen.
P.S. don't make the succubus hairy, also can she lactate or get pregnant?