The author hasn't a clue as to the proper slang terms nor when to use them. It shows most readily when "come" is used not "cum" when referring to an orgasm or other sexual release. This kind of improper thing ends desire to read further.
Sort of flat though, and I think you must be a guy. I don't think most women would be so blase and agree to everything except perhaps when zonked on drugs. I don't think most whores cum very often, if at all, with clients.
I really liked this. I found it witty and intelligent. And to the last two commentors - I have a girlfriend who you only have to have a cock and she will orgasm. Riding a bike she orgasms... And she is working in the sex trade and has non stop orgasms. So, yes, that part is believable because there ARE women like that in the world! I also like the fact that she's intelligent, educated, ambitious, caring of the other girls and realises that what jollies she gets from between her legs is NOT the sum total of her existence. This was excellent. Thanks!
An intelligent and well drawn character, strong plot, and very sex positive. I hope you are still writing and publishing somewhere. The wit of the main character, was very enjoyable and speaks to your own sass. You have a talent for wit and writing. All the best. I
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