Bag Lady & the Retired Marine Ch. 07

Well SusanJillParker, I loved this chapter and gave you five stars. The dialog when they first get to his apartment is funny and somehow just a little pathetic, which you brought out nicely. This is developing into a really nice romance story, looking forward to the next chapter.

Very nice...

I hardly ever read the Romance category. Your title snagged me. Having been a Viet Nam era Marine, it got my interest. I went back and read all the other chapters. I like your characters and I like the development of your story line. Please keep going and I look forward to more good work.

Woodytoo...

Very good read

Great story,can feel the the underlining emotions.Keep up the good work ,Beautiful Lady.I do feel you.

loved it

Susan it just gets better and better . Can't wait for next chapter

joe

wonderful story

I found myself starting to get turned by story and the character Susan.... Great story real Susan. I hope you write more stories with that rare elusive quality of emotional involvement that seems so genuine and well done. You actually outdid yourself. I hope I see you in the New Yorker or some mainstream publication soon.

kudos

I felt that your writing in this chapter drew me in and made me want more. I would love to give you a big hug and say well done Susan. I am afraid you are becoming a really talented author and will disappear into mainstream publications. I really hope you do of course.....your country wants you!!

Another 5 star chapter

with the welcome notation that the story is to be continued.
Make it soon Susan.

as always your writing is drawing us in more and more brillant story yet again and cant wait for more of this one.

Susan, you continue to amaze me, I think this is the best chapter yet. Michael

Another great chapter

I would give it a five but the voting is turned off. The Susan basher trolls must be on the attack again.
I love the banter between these two. Sounds realistic, not like the sophomoric dribble some other authors write. Looking forward to next chapter. You are a good writer.

And the hits just keep on coming

Susan, I don't know how I can compliment you more than I have. I love your writing. It's erotic, it's sensual and it's more than anyone reading Literotica should come to expect. Please keep at it. The real-life way of your stories is intoxicating and compelling.

Susan, Your writing becomes so alive, so real. Clearly your own experiences almost lead the reader into seeing an autobiographical quality about what you write. You treat us to lust, as well as excitement. Priceless!
I only wish I could leave you 5 stars but the voting option isn't here. xx

Great Stuff

Great dialogue and pacing. This is the first chapter I've read - another six chapters added to my to-read list.

:-)

Really enjoyed the story so far, hope it continues. Great interaction and I liked the subject matter. Keep it up. Thanks for sharing.

What is a girl like you doing in a place like this!?

Really good stuff. Engaging, interesting, thought provoking, tender, sensual and really good dialogue. Thanks again, can't wait for the rest. Boy you sure do your homework too. Person just has to wonder how close you are to this story.

Thanks

For a great read.

What happened?

I love the sensuality and familiarity at the end of this chapter.

But, if I have a failing, it is remembering what I have already read. And the alarms are going off in my memories.
"you could bunk with me, until you got a job and back on your feet. I have a spare bedroom,"
became
""There's not much privacy," she said looking around the one bedroom studio apartment. "Do you have a bathroom with a tub?"
"Sorry, I don't have a bathtub but I do have a shower. It's in back," he said pointing behind him, "in the corner."
"I see," she said obviously looking where she'd sleep before eying the couch"
and
"With her big breasts exposed beneath her torn, open shirt and her pants down around her ankles to reveal her blonde pussy, flat stomach, and round ass, Dave felt as much sensitivity for the woman as he did lust.
was followed by
"She looked like a natural blonde but he wondered if she was"

?????.

Yay

That got me all wet. Nothing like a good cock in you after a long intro 🙂