The Perfect Team Ch. 02

Goddamn, I wish authors would stop trying to cross over that BDSM garbage into the non-con genre. The two have absolutely nothing to do with each other, and in fact are polar opposites, one based on entirely on consent, the other completely non-consensual. Even if I were into that, I'd point out that beating and raping a prisoner into submission is not a challenge, and can be done in the bases of third world countries. Further, it makes a Dom look weak and pathetic because they don't have the skills to master a woman normally. Pick a genre and go with it or put it in the catch-all novella column.

4 stars, losing one for clogging up an otherwise decent non-con story with a lot of master and mistress bullshit.

Hmm.

I never thought of it really put like that. Considering non-consent and reluctance would require something to be done to someone unwillingly, why is bondage an unnecessary part of that? Why could it not be a combined effort. Would it be better if she was not hanging from the ceiling but being held down by a man or men/women? If she were unconscious?

The character is not so much a mistress but someone who enjoys using women, against their will (which would be explained in a later chapter)...so, taking them and using them reluctantly. Note also that in the story I have yet to beat this woman or rape her. But, perhaps you're right and it belongs in the BDSM genre, then again she is in this position against her will...perhaps a BDSM reader would frown upon that too.

Picky picky picky. But I appreciate the comment and intend to change things.

I think you could use some tough love

The thought that comes to mind after reading this is: I waited four months for this slapdash piece of crap? If you're going to write for yourself, keep it in your diary. If you're going to write for the rest of us, show your readers some respect and make an effort. If you're actually serious about this, which I suspect you're not, do us the courtesy of acquiring an editor.

mmmm

enjoying this already

please continue ...

XXXXXXXX

Katie

step carefully....

If you move this to BDSM, you will get slammed for the noncon. How you develop the story will make the difference. What is the major angle-the noncon or mistress stuff? To me, this reads like psycho bitch playing at domme when she just wants to abuse people-that's noncon. If she had enticed the girl into this it would be different. Scammed, drugged and kidnapped, yeah-noncon......