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by JonATaylor01/04/13

Funny Stuff

A comic take on the adolescent fantasy of mind control.

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by Anonymous01/09/13

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I liked the idea, but not the execution. That is not to say it was a bad story, just not to my taste. It was interesting as a vignette, but could have been made into something more. I would like to see you retool the idea, with less of a comedic / satirical take, and more about the trials and rewards of testing the drug. Good luck with your writing and thank you for contributing.

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