All Comments on 'Fire and Ice'

by DepthsOfDuality

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jpb531jpb531about 11 years ago
Interesting story

Well written and nicely descriptive, but I didn't care for the forced aspect and lack of safe word.

DepthsOfDualityDepthsOfDualityabout 11 years agoAuthor
Crits

Yeah, I wasn't sure whether to put this in BDSM or the forced category. I'm sorry

You feel I chose poorly.

I view BDSM as a kind of transformational journey, I was playing with the concept of "turning" a human being.

critiquescritiquesabout 11 years ago
Half and Half

Although it was a very interesting story to read, it was EXTREMELY forced. There wasn't exactly a mutual agreement - the character was a bit confused and shocked and drugged. I don't think that BDSM is necessarily about taking advantage. But I'm a newbie so I could be incorrect.

Overall though, it was very interesting to read and was well written. Keep writing; you're good at it!

rdoolittlerdoolittleabout 11 years ago
Potential not realized

I could have gone on reading, but you stopped as you warmed to the subject (no pun intended). I think you have more to share and would like to see it.

DepthsOfDualityDepthsOfDualityabout 11 years agoAuthor
Next Steps

Fear not, rdoolittle, chapter 2 is written and chapter 3 is approaching completion. It think I'll release them simultaneously in the next week. Trust me, it'll get way better from here. Part 2 is my favourite story so far. I'll put it in forced this time :P

AnonymousAnonymousover 8 years ago
This was an opening paragraph

Where is the story in this mess?

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