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I like this one
not only for the title (that means raincoat in French)
AN "I" WORD AND A "U" WORD
can not stop the beat from going on, TK U MLJ LV NV
It's a 5 even if I can't vote!
This to me is a complex and powerful poem because it conveys so much: change and ending and loss that feels too cold to experience regret. There's such a feel of shift and change to it that it almost feels like a rhythm, as if waves are rocking it which is a good thing. :D
Here's what I don't like:
line five: What is the "it" standing in for? In general the shifting pronouns work for the poem, but not this one. I picture this poem happening around the ocean, so for me "it" conjured a sea image. But a reword to get a noun in there would help a lot, imo.
line twelve: "It's too bad" is too good to be lost in the middle of that line because it so underscores the ennui of the narrator. I'd set it apart somehow.
Your writing has become more and more sophisticated, as I suppose have you. It's like watching a flower bloom. xo
Owww!
Well done!
Coffee is bitter & cake sweet but
Emotionsl turbulence hath juxtaposed tge taste @ sunrise In a masterly rendered poem !! Bravo !
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