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Lucien or Julian?
Great start to your story, it had me hooked straight away. The only problem was that in the first half of the chapter Emma's attacker was named Lucien but in the second half while she was in hospital he was called Julian. It comes across as a big error or if she is talking about two different people then it is just confusing. Anyways well done and looking forward to reading more!
Great so far
Can't wait to read the next chapters
Shininglight
Thank you for pointing out the issue with the names. I had meant for the name Julian to be Lucien's last name, but I obviously did not bring that out in the story. Emma is referring to the same person. Once again, thanks. :)
shame on me...
...for not checking to see if this story had been finished before i began reading. i hope you'll return to complete it, but it's been a year so i wont hold my breath.
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