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When I looked at your profile without posting. another idiosyncracy(sp?) of this site.

I felt this was a VERY nice story, but It needs a careful edit. Loose all the 'and's'. rewrite in more of a poetry form, allowing single lines to pound thoughts and images into the minds of your readers. Not too shabby for a second poem.

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5ed for content

Respects

Harry

a dream or an Orgasm intestate. TK U MLJ LV NV