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by Anonymous

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by HarryHill01/09/13

Have I seen this one before?

The last stanza seems familiar

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by tazz31701/09/13

A NEW DAY BEGUN

with more babble to add. TK U MLJ LV NV

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by Desejo01/09/13

The first two lines are really interesting to me because of the double meaning of "lie". I like the contrast of a frantic scribble and idle thoughts too. The way you have broken up the stanzas gives this a run on, stream of consciousness quality that works well. Repetition of the word "about" reinforces that, and gives it almost a spoken word quality when read aloud (I am not expert, just my opinion). The last stanza ties it all back to the title, but in a really subtle way, evoking new year's eve and those pesky resolutions. Really like this.

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by Angeline01/09/13

An appropriate meander

to the temporal silliness of New Year's resolutions. Your writing is very compact and flows so well. I think you have a great feel for natural, conversational writing. I'd like to see a smattering of more imagery but that's me. All in all it's a really well-written poem, an effective poem imho, :-)

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