Now I must say, your last two sentences were a bit of a drastic turn of emotions. I did not see anything in the preceding chapters that told your loyal readers Susan had such a negative view of herself. That she would go from a loving, passionate woman to a cold hearted female in a nano second. Ah well, no doubt we will be enlightened in the next chapter.
Sorry but you confuse emotional issues with cold heartedness. One may go hand in hand with the other but one seldom has anything to do with the other.
Think about who Susan was when you were first introduced to her. She was a bag lady sleeping in an alley.
Forsaking the warmth of a shelter, bad enough for a man to sleep on the street, what kind of woman is Susan to sleep on the unsafe city streets of downtown Harrisburg? In the way of a wild animal brought in from the cold and fed, you'd be surprised otherwise if she didn't bite the hand that fed her.
Perhaps in time, she'll come around. I don't even know (lol), as I haven't written that part yet.
Thanks for reading, voting, and taking the time to write a comment to my story.
This could get interesting. On the one hand Susan is suffering from PTSD herself. Then she finds that so is he. He wakes up in the night in sweats suffering from ancient nightmares. He is deaf from being exposed to constant loud noises. Anytime someone comes near him that he didn't hear or see approach he jumps out of his skin and starts swearing like a madman. Dave had not attempted to have emotional closeness yet and finds out he can't. He broods and stares off into the distance with the "thousand mile stare". Susan finds that his need for good order in his life is all that he has to hold himself together. These two characters are meant to have an incredibly volitle relationship. Character Susan has met her match in an emotionally damaged person.....
These are 2 people that bring so much baggage to any relationship let alone their own relationship, I can't wait to see how they learn to trust each other and to trust themselves. I feel sorry for poor dave, he keeps jumping and she doesn't even know what to think and then when she begins to let her guard down he jumps to the next level. I wonder if he's ever heard the expression "slow and steady wins the race". Awww but his heart is in the right place and that's what I think keeps Susan there.
I can't wait for your next chapter SJP. I just love a good romantic story!
You deal with real people who have real .problems and real needs. The words "I love you." can be just a much of a trap as any cage to some people. Male and female both. I feel there is enough genuine feeling here for both people to work their way past this problem but I know it will not be easy.
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Now I must say, your last two sentences were a bit of a drastic turn of emotions. I did not see anything in the preceding chapters that told your loyal readers Susan had such a negative view of herself. That she would go from a loving, passionate woman to a cold hearted female in a nano second. Ah well, no doubt we will be enlightened in the next chapter.
Sorry but...
Sorry but you confuse emotional issues with cold heartedness. One may go hand in hand with the other but one seldom has anything to do with the other.
Think about who Susan was when you were first introduced to her. She was a bag lady sleeping in an alley.
Forsaking the warmth of a shelter, bad enough for a man to sleep on the street, what kind of woman is Susan to sleep on the unsafe city streets of downtown Harrisburg? In the way of a wild animal brought in from the cold and fed, you'd be surprised otherwise if she didn't bite the hand that fed her.
Perhaps in time, she'll come around. I don't even know (lol), as I haven't written that part yet.
Thanks for reading, voting, and taking the time to write a comment to my story.
SusanJillParker
The final twist to this chapter
Stirs my interest and my desire to see how this affair is going to end.
It's been five stars all the way so far.
Looking forward to next chapter.
Glad you threw in the emotional shift in Susan. It will make for an interesting next chapter.
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This could get interesting. On the one hand Susan is suffering from PTSD herself. Then she finds that so is he. He wakes up in the night in sweats suffering from ancient nightmares. He is deaf from being exposed to constant loud noises. Anytime someone comes near him that he didn't hear or see approach he jumps out of his skin and starts swearing like a madman. Dave had not attempted to have emotional closeness yet and finds out he can't. He broods and stares off into the distance with the "thousand mile stare". Susan finds that his need for good order in his life is all that he has to hold himself together. These two characters are meant to have an incredibly volitle relationship. Character Susan has met her match in an emotionally damaged person.....
i just love this story!
These are 2 people that bring so much baggage to any relationship let alone their own relationship, I can't wait to see how they learn to trust each other and to trust themselves. I feel sorry for poor dave, he keeps jumping and she doesn't even know what to think and then when she begins to let her guard down he jumps to the next level. I wonder if he's ever heard the expression "slow and steady wins the race". Awww but his heart is in the right place and that's what I think keeps Susan there.
I can't wait for your next chapter SJP. I just love a good romantic story!
Not to strange when you think about it
You deal with real people who have real .problems and real needs. The words "I love you." can be just a much of a trap as any cage to some people. Male and female both. I feel there is enough genuine feeling here for both people to work their way past this problem but I know it will not be easy.
Too short!
The chapters are way too short. Every time I get into the story it stops.
funny twist
Why this sudden separation ?.Bag Lady and Marine had distorted and hurt lives.He can love her and she loving him would be good.
The Plot!!!
Thickens!!!!!! Good chapter. Thanks.
he had to mess it up with talking diddnt he?
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