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by Anonymous

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by Desejo01/10/13

I like this. Very visual, and the structure works well. I think the ending could be stronger by bringing the reader back either to the title or to one of the initial lines in the poem, maybe using something as simple as repetition of a word or even by moving one of the sky blue lines to the end. Well done.

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by HarryHill01/10/13

Like this one Kokshur

I like how the upper and lower shapes meet connecting the description of the girl to the pastoral where she lies

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by tazz31701/10/13

AN IDYLLIC SUMMER PICNIC

to a field on the farm. TK U MLJ LV NV

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