Your ideas are keen insights to the human condition. Initial character developments paint a solid image of the thinking that person. Subtle details aid in fleshing them out for me. I enjoyed your use of the phrase, "disabused him of that notion," because the dumbing down of America seems so prevalent as to be contrived.
Now the down side of this piece.
There are no prurient details to take a reader to the moment of lust and release. May seem trivial to some, but the truth is those associations are crucial for reader acceptance here. A fragrance can bring on powerful memories. I have never walked into a strip club or girly show where the place I entered did not smell like a full toilet. That not so subtle look back to check a man out following his unexpected compliment to a married woman.
Life smells good and bad. People are both good and bad. Underlying reasons are straight forward and hidden. Add some paragraphs to make the people feel their sex.
So real very close to what my wife and i have experienced as she has met several black bulls to service her hot cunt, she goes crazy over black cock and we meet some several times a week, have mostly regular ones now that enjoy her needs for black cock
i love cleanin up now , never thought i would
Utterly fabulous story. In some ways it is so similar to my experiences, watching my wife slut herself with her two black stud boyfriends. Nothing quite matches seeing that! I hope there's going to be a lot more chapters as Garrett works his way through a huge list of slutwives.
great story and so true to life , i wish my husband would go for me seeing black cock when ever i wanted, but he would die and he is so jealous of any man really. So i have to be very discreet to meet black cock for my satisfaction , i can not help myself now i have to have black cock often as i can
Really appreciate the positive feedback and very helpful constructive criticism. I am working on Part II to the story as time permits. Again, thanks to those who took time to leave constructive feedback!
I wished that Garret had been a bit more ruthless and less of a gentleman; being prepared to seduce and not caring too much about anyone's feelings. Whilst glad that the ladies found Garret to be attractive, I'd rather they'd been reluctant "victims" of his seduction and their husbands less enthusiastic about being made cuckolds
Great story, though. I still enjoyed it despite my above misgivings and I look forward to reading Chapter 2.
You're a good writer, keep on writing. I look forward to reading more of your stuff
I'm smiling about your comment that Garrett is a bit too much of a gentleman because as I was working on Part 3 the exact same thought occurred to me. I think this will change to your liking. Stay tuned.
Nice read. My wife is into black men with my approval.
Many people think cuckolds are sexually inadequate, but I can tell you this is not true. There is nothing hotter than a white wife surrendering her body to a dominant black man in front of her husband.
I think this could easily develop into where he cares less and less about them and starts to use them harder and more and more degradingly as the husbands look on. Yes great room for development in all sorts of ways.
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EXCELLENT STORY STRUCTURE BUT,
Your ideas are keen insights to the human condition. Initial character developments paint a solid image of the thinking that person. Subtle details aid in fleshing them out for me. I enjoyed your use of the phrase, "disabused him of that notion," because the dumbing down of America seems so prevalent as to be contrived.
Now the down side of this piece.
There are no prurient details to take a reader to the moment of lust and release. May seem trivial to some, but the truth is those associations are crucial for reader acceptance here. A fragrance can bring on powerful memories. I have never walked into a strip club or girly show where the place I entered did not smell like a full toilet. That not so subtle look back to check a man out following his unexpected compliment to a married woman.
Life smells good and bad. People are both good and bad. Underlying reasons are straight forward and hidden. Add some paragraphs to make the people feel their sex.
gee
can I say this is so racist and stereotyping that its flat sucks
HOT
So real very close to what my wife and i have experienced as she has met several black bulls to service her hot cunt, she goes crazy over black cock and we meet some several times a week, have mostly regular ones now that enjoy her needs for black cock
i love cleanin up now , never thought i would
Utterly fabulous story. In some ways it is so similar to my experiences, watching my wife slut herself with her two black stud boyfriends. Nothing quite matches seeing that! I hope there's going to be a lot more chapters as Garrett works his way through a huge list of slutwives.
Wonderful
great story and so true to life , i wish my husband would go for me seeing black cock when ever i wanted, but he would die and he is so jealous of any man really. So i have to be very discreet to meet black cock for my satisfaction , i can not help myself now i have to have black cock often as i can
Thanks Very Much!
Really appreciate the positive feedback and very helpful constructive criticism. I am working on Part II to the story as time permits. Again, thanks to those who took time to leave constructive feedback!
"Dipping his wick in a married inkwell"
Ha ha, I loved that one!
I wished that Garret had been a bit more ruthless and less of a gentleman; being prepared to seduce and not caring too much about anyone's feelings. Whilst glad that the ladies found Garret to be attractive, I'd rather they'd been reluctant "victims" of his seduction and their husbands less enthusiastic about being made cuckolds
Great story, though. I still enjoyed it despite my above misgivings and I look forward to reading Chapter 2.
You're a good writer, keep on writing. I look forward to reading more of your stuff
Thanks, Lynn-MMX; And Stay Tuned
I'm smiling about your comment that Garrett is a bit too much of a gentleman because as I was working on Part 3 the exact same thought occurred to me. I think this will change to your liking. Stay tuned.
Nice read. My wife is into black men with my approval.
Many people think cuckolds are sexually inadequate, but I can tell you this is not true. There is nothing hotter than a white wife surrendering her body to a dominant black man in front of her husband.
Yummy
I think this could easily develop into where he cares less and less about them and starts to use them harder and more and more degradingly as the husbands look on. Yes great room for development in all sorts of ways.
So Good!
"You've never filled me up like this -- it's sooo good.
Not ashamed to say that I jized in my undies right about here.
SO GOOD!
Sick bullshit!!! Put this shit in IR!!!!
Put this nasty shit in IR!!!!
Great Story
I believe that there are many white women who want to feel a lack cock in their pussy and mouth. If they want it and like it why not?
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