All Comments on 'Millions Corrupt'

thats it?

Young women can be both shallow and coniving at the same time.

Main character does not invoke sympathy. As a guy he comes across as lame.

The entire set up just does not work for me.

Do not see why he needs to be a millionaire for this story...

The next installment had been added and the third is being written.

I find feedback that simply bashes the work without making suggestions on how to improve the story considerably less helpful...

For the first part of the story, Mr Storm doesn't need millions but he doesn't have to go into a job or report to anyone which will give him some time freedom that will become bigger opportunities for... corruption. (Besides, it's part ofthe overall fantasy)