All Comments on 'Morgan's Mistakes Ch. 01'

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
Terrible writing

Can't decide on a tense, dialog is wooden, just a mess.

Editor time.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
Not Bad

Feels like the writing is rushed

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 8 years ago
Who is John?

Chills run down her spine as she rises up and Chris grabs both of her breasts. They fill up his powerful hands easily, boobs big enough where he can give a rough squeeze. Groping gently with his fingertips, Morgan bites John's ear and whispers: "I won't fuck you tonight, but maybe I can make up for it."

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