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Good storyline.
Can you keep it going? Now that the gates are open....does she desire variety?
Thanks Don
Katie you got the car rolling !!!!!!!!!!!!!
Now PLEASE, don't put on the breaks.This is getting hot, and the incest has started. This story could turn into a series. I think your just the girl who could do it. Your story line is great, Mom and Jason truly love each other. keep them together, no outsiders PLEASE. When you add outsiders that are not family, the story always goes bad in the end. Mom turns into a slut, and sonny boy the pimp.Good Luck with chapter 03:. LAROC OF AGES
Great.
Now that's telling a story, please keep it going, just as you did here...
What is with everyone doing small parts at a time
It drives me nuts to the point I don't bother reading the story till all the parts are read and then I only vote on the last part for who really wants to go to all previous parts to vote. I try to support the authors but this little here and there is nuts when it's hours/days till the next part and by then the thrill of the beginning as already faded.
This is a great account of mother and son messing around!
The author is clearly highly talented, and we have a good idea where the story's going. Wisely, the writer is taking it slow--it builds up tension and excitement. The scene is set: the mother is in awe of her hero athlete boy, she feels a tingle between her legs when she looks over his hunky body. Jason is equally excited by his mom. When he hugs her, his mother sees "a raging erection flourishing in Jason's shorts." There's only one logical place for the boy to stick his raging hard on, his mother's mommy-hole, and that's where Jason's prick is headed.
It drives mne nuts
when some ass like live for the BJ complains about how someone writes a story, when apparently they haven't authored any themselves. Kudos to another person willing to author a story on Literotica. Do it however you feel and don't worry about numbnuts complainers. As long as you have a great plot and you try to compose it excellently, then that is all that matters to me. Great story so far!
Well Done!
This is a very well written story, and is building to a hot interlude between a mother and her son.
You've done a great job introducing the characters, and have made this a believable hot story.
You have me waiting for part 3.
Well Done!
***
Not quite 4 stars but close. I agree with the others that you are pretty good. So you can get better. I wish you had described what she was wearing in bed. So Jason is outside the bed, she is under the covers. Okay. But do the covers come down some when he is embracing her? Is she embracing him back? How does his skin feel to her? Critics of my kind of thinking say, hey, where is your imagination--talking to me, the reader. To them I say, yeah, I can supply details myself but I want the author to do that. That's the author's job. Tell us a little about her boobs. Is she wearing a nightie? How sheer? Stuff like that. Linger a little longer in the scene. You get the picture but we want to see it too, just a little more clearly. Otherwise, good job.
your the best
I'm not sure if your married single divorce or what but I really enjoy your writing please keep up the marvelous work baby
Building the Passion
And the passion builds... Excellent!
Development!
Great story telling, and great grammar! Almost no one on Literotica equals your use of grammar. Brilliant!
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