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Good Work
After your early two tries I think you found the right story line and it was enjoyed. Like your work and hope you keep it up. Thanks.
So Worth The Time To Read
I'm more than a little surprised to not see more comments here. I found your story to be extremely enjoyable to read.I can see how this story could continue indefinitely,and with that thought,I encourage you to continue the story with these characters.I was curious about Nila for example.Please carry on,and thank you for your efforts.
GREAT
What a story, great read, just a bit long behind one title but it would be a 5+ if it was posible.
why 101 pages with 1 description
How lazy of the author to not even make into chapters. You can search for virtually any word and find this story - and up to the read to scan the 100 pages to find it?? That is either lazy or self-centered.
Unbelievable, in many ways
As with any story of this length, a lot of repetition that an editor might have trimmed. But incredibly hot in sections, and in overall conception. The female characters all felt fairly interchangeable from a dialogue standpoint, though their character conceptions were different. Only Char (initially) had a different voice, Nila and Molly's dialogue was interchangeable, a little too much parallelism. Despite these complaints I gave it 5 stars due to the quality of the overall writing and audacity of conception. With better editing of the storyline this story is easily at the quality of the best writing from Rehnquist, Daniel Q. Steele, QHM1, etc. Only 4 comments previously, if this had been in Loving Wives there would have been 1500.
101 PAGES - HOW INCONSIDERATE & LAZY
OK - I admit 101 pages is a lot of writing but if you search for a phrase you like & find this story - good luck finding the phrase in 101 pages !@! MAYBE easy for the author to never break into chapters - to never come up with a different description for each chapter - to just write write write but how inconsiderate for the reader. AND from my scan talk about taking 100 words to say a 4 word phrase !@! JUST TOO MUCH Darn effort to try to find anything. PLEASE BREAK THIS UP, if you have any consideration for your readers at all.
Hard to believe
you kept my attention that long !! Ya sucked me into that story kid ! That was a fun read and I enjoyed it a lot...Thanks for the effort and imagination ( even developed all of those characters ) it must have taken to wander thru this strange flight of the whatever your twisted mind was doing while you were writing this. I was entertained and amused all the way thru. Your efforts weren't wasted on me. I spent hours inside your very odd mind and it was fun. Nice to go there and then say thanks (harder to do with paper books) to the author. Good job! Scotty .. slowrdr@aol.com
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