You had the makings of a very fun story with all kinds of possibilites, but then you left us hanging... I would call this a tease because you talked a good game but didn't give enough of a "feel" to think I got something! Now it's time to deliver on that and put out Part 2 through 5 if they're going to follow suit.
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Anonymous01/27/13
Boring and pathetic attempt to pull the reader in, not enough to get me to come back and read more. 1*
Sorry, guys, I am new here... I shoulda given some more in the first chapter. Your comments are fair.
I have five more written. One is "pending" and should be released in a couple days, others will be released quickly thereafter. There will be about 10 chapters to this story, I think.
Much of this is real, and she is reading this with a great deal of enthusiasm. You are reading each chapter at the same time as she is.
What is the story here? Her husband is a cuckold, we know that. Does he know it? Her husband is hung up on black folks? So now her lover hires a black escort who bring two other studs with him? They are going to dance, are they bi? Is her lover bi? Explain please
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Wait..I mean wh...where's the story
You had the makings of a very fun story with all kinds of possibilites, but then you left us hanging... I would call this a tease because you talked a good game but didn't give enough of a "feel" to think I got something! Now it's time to deliver on that and put out Part 2 through 5 if they're going to follow suit.
Boring and pathetic attempt to pull the reader in, not enough to get me to come back and read more. 1*
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Sorry, guys, I am new here... I shoulda given some more in the first chapter. Your comments are fair.
I have five more written. One is "pending" and should be released in a couple days, others will be released quickly thereafter. There will be about 10 chapters to this story, I think.
Much of this is real, and she is reading this with a great deal of enthusiasm. You are reading each chapter at the same time as she is.
What?!?
What is the story here? Her husband is a cuckold, we know that. Does he know it? Her husband is hung up on black folks? So now her lover hires a black escort who bring two other studs with him? They are going to dance, are they bi? Is her lover bi? Explain please
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