No, you are a BORING woman, after all. Your racist narrative style stories are very boring.
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Anonymous01/20/13
Ugh
As a South African I find your racist nonsense annoying, offensive and just plain disgusting. Not only that but your writing style is awful, there's nothing to grip the reader at all and your plot line is flawed to say the least. P.S it sounds like you couldn't get into the psyche of a boere meisie even if you had actually tried rather than turning out this ish. Don't give up the day job, and try broadening your mind, seriously.
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Anonymous01/22/13
A boer in Joburg? Are you nuts?
Haha! You should stop learning bad history from wiki. And since when is Joburg University the most prestigous in SA? And 'boer meisies' in one of the biggest metropols in SA? Nah man.... But kudos for the fact you keep on writing while the readers keep on hating.
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Anonymous01/23/13
i'm sorry i read this story.
I don't know enough about africa to comment on that component, but I will say this story falls flat on it's face. It's neither an interesting narrative, nor is it an interesting read of erotica. I didn't find myself excited in the slightest. The sex scene was super rushed to the point of total let down. That makes the reader frustrated and annoyed.
You really need to examine your writing style. One should know enough about the characters and place to be seemingly realistic without being offensive or racist.
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Anonymous03/04/13
What I'd rather read...
I'd rather read a story about South Africa of a black hero battling pro-Apartheid terrorists led by a beautiful blonde Boer lesbian (she fucks and kills black girls for fun). The black stud hero is captured and about to be castrated... but then he manages to turn the tables and destroys the evil Boer bitch and her organization. THAT would be an exciting read.
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Anonymous09/03/13
Wow. What utter crap.
I really think you should consider not writing again. As in never ever ever again.
English
I am a Boer woman, after all.
"I am a Boer woman, after all."
No, you are a BORING woman, after all. Your racist narrative style stories are very boring.
Ugh
As a South African I find your racist nonsense annoying, offensive and just plain disgusting. Not only that but your writing style is awful, there's nothing to grip the reader at all and your plot line is flawed to say the least. P.S it sounds like you couldn't get into the psyche of a boere meisie even if you had actually tried rather than turning out this ish. Don't give up the day job, and try broadening your mind, seriously.
A boer in Joburg? Are you nuts?
Haha! You should stop learning bad history from wiki. And since when is Joburg University the most prestigous in SA? And 'boer meisies' in one of the biggest metropols in SA? Nah man.... But kudos for the fact you keep on writing while the readers keep on hating.
i'm sorry i read this story.
I don't know enough about africa to comment on that component, but I will say this story falls flat on it's face. It's neither an interesting narrative, nor is it an interesting read of erotica. I didn't find myself excited in the slightest. The sex scene was super rushed to the point of total let down. That makes the reader frustrated and annoyed.
You really need to examine your writing style. One should know enough about the characters and place to be seemingly realistic without being offensive or racist.
What I'd rather read...
I'd rather read a story about South Africa of a black hero battling pro-Apartheid terrorists led by a beautiful blonde Boer lesbian (she fucks and kills black girls for fun). The black stud hero is captured and about to be castrated... but then he manages to turn the tables and destroys the evil Boer bitch and her organization. THAT would be an exciting read.
Wow. What utter crap.
I really think you should consider not writing again. As in never ever ever again.
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