by emisweetie
At least I hope it's a start. lol...you left lot's of questions and I hope that we'll see explanations in the next chapter. :)
I have read so many stories and this story just bored me to death and I did not get the plot or storyline what so ever...
To be blunt, anyone who didn't understand the story probably isn't used to stories that require thinking. What's not to understand? Damien and the others robbed a bank together. Damien doublecrossed them. They caught him, and his punishment for screwing them over was they took his wife and kid, and left him to hold the bag. It's not rocket science... I doubt any wife/daughter would so quickly turn on him (a sure sign of a bad writer -> "as she was being gang raped, Bambi noticed she was being double penetrated by two nine inch dicks, and, to her surprise, she started to like it"... really? really?) but it was a solid submission not withstanding. Don't downrate him because you can't figure out basic story lines...
At the start you think this is going to be interesting.
It lacks content and is boring
It was a little abrupt, the whole seduction could have been longer, more detailed. But welcome back to writing after so many years! Waiting for more.
A nice story of cuckold in jail with his wife and daughter the play things for men in the mob. To be used for a year before they are sold off. With a call at times to cuckold who will be told what has been done to them and how often. Meanwhile cuckold is taken by a couple of the bi studs in prison and will suck and swallow and get his pussy bred over and over like the sissy he is.
Mother should not be capitalized if "her" is in in front of it. Basic English 101. No need to capitalize police either but other than that the story was . . . yeah. right.