nice work but you could use alittle more character divelopment in a story like this
This is really awesome
It needs some serious editing, it is really disruptive when you have to pause your reading to figure out the meaning of what you just read. I would also have liked to see more inside the main characters head, his/her feelings about his transformation and the different sensations of her new body. Please keep on writing, the story was still really hot, but please, make use of an editor!
This is a Really good story I enjoyed reading it. It makes me so hard even though I'm imagining it from the view point of Sara. I can't wait till you make another one. I would like to hear more about Ashley individual feelings and how she develops as a character learning to love cock more and more. I would love to see Sara become less dominant and be more relaxed while pleasuring her sluts. it would be great if there was a back to back fuck, Sara on Ashley Ashley on the genie. Thanks anyways
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