All Comments on 'An Unorthodox Sales Contest Ch. 11'

Make them longer!

I felt like I got trapped by this chapter. The story needed to move on, but I didn't have much to say. The next chapter is not only much longer, but not related to this one, so I felt that I was better off posting this one separately. I'll put Chapter 12 up for review immediately, but it will be at least 3 days, if not longer for it to appear. Thanks for letting me know that I probably needed to write more for this chapter. Keep the comments coming!

I too think you need to slow down and elaborate. "five, ten minutes" went by in three words? What was Ryan feeling?

I'll look at the future chapters and do that. Thanks so much for taking the time to comment.

I love this type of erotica. I found it quite subtle with a controlling element. Well done.