It's remarkable to me that you have some skill at writing, yet your story line has no consistency. You are skilled at the language and can put together a sentence (which is more than I can say for many writers on Lit.!) You are an enigma to me. I'm confused.
Generally when you read part 2, it follows what took place in part one of the story. There are just two stories with the same characters. And, while I'm offering what I hope is a constructive critique (if you read these), why is your description of these stories so off base? Again, I'm a bit perplexed.
Otherwise, you show promise. Maybe an editor could help you fix these errors. Just a suggestion.
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How is this a part 2?
It's remarkable to me that you have some skill at writing, yet your story line has no consistency. You are skilled at the language and can put together a sentence (which is more than I can say for many writers on Lit.!) You are an enigma to me. I'm confused.
Generally when you read part 2, it follows what took place in part one of the story. There are just two stories with the same characters. And, while I'm offering what I hope is a constructive critique (if you read these), why is your description of these stories so off base? Again, I'm a bit perplexed.
Otherwise, you show promise. Maybe an editor could help you fix these errors. Just a suggestion.
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