Comenting as a businessman: I think that the compnay should have made a better effort to eductae their employees in computer age technology. Although I do have some old semi-retirees who don't have any tech skills still doing their highly skilled manuel labour.
There is a company working on making technology i.e Iphones better suited for the older baby boomer generation.
Anyway thats just by the by. I'll comment on content later. Carry on Writing and I'll keep reading.
the fact he took back his whore of a wife kind of killed the story.
She was nothing but a slut but i guess some men like women that sleep around and fuck others and still declare love for them. To me those are worthless pieces of trash that need to be thrown away.
Commenting as a proof-reader .....
MickyMouse (sic) you need to press F7 more often, If you don't know what it does, then ask Manuel.
Nine was the quick count of errors in your brief effort, and that was not including the mis-use of i.e. And did you happen to notice the panel "Edit your Comment"
But as for the tale even at nine pages it was as good as ever, We all slightly suspend disbelief all the time.
Stang, gotta say that U've truly kept me entertained, Fur and November come to mind, among many others.....but this last tale is gettin' off into Matt Moreau territory......that being said, Mary sure sounds like my ex.......Thanx for all of your stories
Not my kind of story. I can't believe he took the bitch back!
matt moreau, makes me puke how anybody can live that way or write about it.
I have to say, That had the single stupidest contention point out of every story i've ever read, Let me get this right. She slept with her boss, So she could get her husband. Who she loves... a job in her office so they could be together all day.
Seriously man, Its time to stop writing.
... the most complicated plot I've read you to try to handle.
You're reaching, stretching. It was a little clumsy, but you'll grow into it.
You make me smile and laugh again! I'm stealing the raccoon line!
There are times when your women are just so fucking pitiful and dumb that you feel sorry for them and want to give them a second chance. This was one of those times - but not to fucking often or you will have to add mm or jpb as initials to your name. 5
In order to win back the fool you fucked around on.... You tell him just what a lying conniving slut you really are and he takes you back? I gave you a **** for the originality of the reconciliation. As a fantasy it works in real life defenestration would have been in order.
I am glad to see that you have the guts to try anything.
I liked it.
You are just bound and determined never to create another new character so long a you live, aren't you?
Still a good storyteller, and god help LW without your input, but retire the cartoons and invent some people.
How sad it is when a good writer comes up with something as sorry as this tale.
I am afraid that that the explanation of why she fucked Lou did not win me over but it is author's choice and I did enjoy the ride up until the unwarranted reconciliation.
Yeah, I know, they loved each other! But,is that enough to heal the wounds?
Mustang man, sometimes you seriously disappoint me. This story was one of those times.
for a lifetime of being a whore.
no justice, one star.
Fuck all the naysayers. Mr. Star, of all the stories of yours I've read( I haven't missed too many), to me, this is your Pièce de Résistance. I thought it was great. Flowed extremely well, characters were great and they were consistent and the plot, while not intricate, still made me want to go to the next page. The only, slight, shortfall is the reason she cheated, I think financial trouble or something similar. 5 stars. Please write more stories like this. Maybe an amnesia plot next
If i had been hurt that bad, i would not have taken her back. Except! if i loved her that much and could trust again, i would have jumped at the chance. THANKS AGAIN
I like your work. But this gets a 3 only because I can not see things happening quite like this as the lady was so stupid in fucking to get her hubby a job working near her so they could be closer together. No one is that damn dumb. And no one gets hurt that bad and goes back to or doesn't divorce the other.
First, I'm sorry I don't have an account to be able to put up my name. That said, I have to say that I love reading lots of authors on Literotica, but you, SS06, are my ALL-TIME FAVORITE!!! I read your new stories almost the same day they're out. 5 stars isn't enough, and I have indeed read all of your tales. Please keep it going, and you will always have me anxiously waiting for your newest.
I have read every story ( I think). This one is right up there with the best.
I don't know where you get your ideas, or frankly where you get the time to write them, so thanks for the effort to keep us entertained and another great story.
Eight pages of gold, but that last page of tin knocked it down a star for me. Or in terms I usually use, this home run was caught on the warning track.
I often have a problem coming up with names for characters in my stories, but I do try to stay away from using such known characters as Lou Grant or Mary. Stang must be a fan of the old TV shows....perhaps he will use Andy or Gomer in his next story. lol
I don't get the extremes of BtB or saintly martyr-like forgiveness, and I don't know how realistic any story like this will feel, but I liked it. She was an idiot and a schemer, but she learned and there wasn't some string of guys before, and at least in her head she was trying to do something for their marriage.
Still a definite idiot, but a nice change to at least try to give someone another chance and have them actually learn from their mistakes.
great even tho i look forward to your submission sometimes i like you shorter ones better. this one was great. love the ending very plausible. get tired of those burn the bitch ending. i was throw down the gantlet to all the writer here can anyone write an story where the husband betrayed doesn't end up with an lot of money. be real i don't think any of you have tons of money
So she fucks her boss for 5 years and is rewarded by her husband. Sorry but what the fuck?
His wife lied, plotted and schemed to get some guy to steal his girlfriend away, then she fucks the guy as payment. Then she schemed and lied to get him fired and fucks her boss while degrading her husband as payment for the treachery, leaving her husband completely destroyed and suicidal. After all her back stabbing and betrayal, he takes her back and they live happily ever after? And this man supposedly founded a hugely successful business? No explanation of why he trusts her not to do it again, just "Oh great, tits!" This story just fell apart like you just got tired of writing. I've read all your stories and this is the first that got less than 4 stars. Looking forward to the next one.
I really enjoy how you produce one great one after another. Please keep them coming.
Even though the outcome seems unlikely, the story is a winner. I loved the characters & the interesting plot twists. Thanks.
No matter the topic, you always do a good story........and I keep reading them. thanks
A very interesting story-I couldn't stop reading it.
I felt very sorry for Grace who was attractive compassionate, intelligent, astute and perceptive unlike the slutty and undeserving Elvina who 'only' had two large appendages. Grace would probably have been a much better mother too!
The author should be rather tougher on his editors and vice versa. While recognising that editing is harder than it looks spelling mistakes and omitted-word errors do detract from the story
I'm usuallly a Stangstar fan. After reading some of these commments, I've been trying to figure out what was there to like about this story? It pissed me off.
I'll have to agree with some of the other commenters. This was a tough read. Usually when I read one of SS06 stories I can flow right through it. He is one of my favorite authors on here. That didn't happen this time though. I will have to also say that I didn't like the ending. I would've rather seen him end up with Grace. There really wasn't much to like about Elvina. All women are a little bit manipulative but she was down right shady about it! It's hard to enjoy a story when you absolutely depise one of the characters that you're supposed to like in the end. It just kind of made me mad that she won him back after being such a cunt for so long! Fuck the reason why she did it, to me it is irrelevent! 3*
Stang, I read your latest early this morning, and have been chewing the cud, as it were.....just a little background.....live in Texas, and most of my companeros are from points south.....nasty women find themselves in an interesting situation when they've been sold to a whorehouse in some dusty part of rural Mexico......hooked on smack and put in a stall...oh well...white women with tetas grandes, mighty popular.....so, while I ain't sayin' to let air in her head, some major comeuppance is seriously deserved, just for basic pride.....BTW, this happens more than U would think...Shoot, big tits like that, ten grand, and they transport the sleazy slut...and do the whole sad letter and newspaper thing....cheers, MGTOW
so why bother reading the 8 pages?
1. Vina lies and manipulates some dumb as shit ex boyfriend to steal away Danny's geek girlfriend
2 Then Vina decides that the only way to get Danny to work with her in her office every day is get him FIRED?... now that is True Love
and of course she just HAS to fuck Lou to get this done right ?
congrats SS06 you are the new JPB....
3 so naturally after wasting 30 minutes reading this ... danny takes her back... um why???.... oh yeah big tits
Tell me it isn't so!
Tell me you aren't becoming CS6 (Cuckstang6)!!
"I'm just a woman that made a mistake" sums up the central therme/lie here.
But that is not correct!!
Burning the brownies is a mistake.
Even running a red light is a mistake.
But lying to and deceiving your husband, having sex with another guy and trash talking your husband while you're at it (for whatever reason) is NOT "just a mistake."
If she had shot someone so he could take that person's job and work close to her, would the courts have said "ah, shucks! just a mistake" and given her a pass?
No. HELL NO!!
If you are going to turn into MM, etc I for one, won't need to continue reading your heretofore great stories.
I agree with CBM - somehow I was rooting for this psychotic first wife in spite of her obvious and many flaws. Fabulous mystery as to why she did what she did. Excellent resolution of the loose ends. Clever and original.
Harry if you are such a genius perhaps you need to start posting YOUR stories so we can piss all over them like you do to others every week. Stang and his trusty editor MOTB do a fantastic job and I for one really appreciate their imagination and craftsmanship.
have nothing to do with whether or not he should have taken her back. For those who are upset by that - it's a story! Get over it!
My complaint, however is that there is so much totally unnecessary repetition in it. It's like one of those awful documaentaries on the Discovery channel where, after each break for adverts, they have to go over everything in the previous part just in case the audience has lost it in two minutes or so!
Take all the repetition and recalls out and this would be a good story of about 4 or 5 pages. Your writing may be good - but you really need to make it tighter!
"HOW-MUCH-I-MISSED-THISSSSSSSSS," The last word was drawn out as she collapsed onto me, her breasts heaved and I could feel her sheath clutching and fluttering my member.
she fucked on the job, whore, and while looking for her husband she loves so much she keeps fucking the loser she got caught with. Can you say dumb ass broad. Easy way to find, with name change, social security number. She is married to him income tax filing.
She wasnt worth marrying in the first place. The wen was a much better choice. Best thing what he said call there company get both fired and get on with life instead of going thru same thing a few years later.
You dont bring the trash home you throw it out
Not the usual Stangstar BTB type story, but to be honest, I really genuinely enjoyed this one. Although the wife had some issues, her intentions were well-founded.
well written reguardless of what the dullard's say. I get that you're writing drama with a little romance and all that stuff. I am confused as to why he would take her back, but it is after all your story. It was really close to a Matt M. story but the small differences kept it just out of range. Gave it a 4****.
Elvina's concept of love is, at best, self-serving, if not indicative of narcissistic personality disorder. And yet for all her manipulative, self-serving, hedonistic, and scheming, we are supposed to believe that she loves Danny and wants what is best for him? Puh-leez, this woman should have been torched. You used to be a good writer StangStar--now you're just a long-winded JPB....
Well SS06 showing his other side!!!
Not your usual ending but still think you're a great story teller.
Great!!!...I am wiping a few tears away due to memories...but I so look forward to Thursdays now!
Well written, as usual. The plot is painful as is often the case in these stories as well as in relationships. The hitchhiker almost had it right, "Love is for suckers". Actually obsession is for suckers. I have not too many wives that truly love their husbands that fuck other men. Elvina would have to be severely mentally retarded to fuck her boss just to get her husband moved over to her office. (weak plot device) That is the stuff of nightmares and drug use, not reality. That kind of takes you out of the story. The shattered man goes off and is able to get over his pain enough to become a wildly successful multimillionaire - the stuff of a 14 year-old's fantasy. Then he takes the old bag he's addicted to back after 5 years of fucking her boss? YUCK! Who's fantasy is that? Maybe a middle aged menopausal woman's wet (Dry?) dream or some weird "wimp"? ICK! You have a great way of spinning a tale, but it often leads to some strange places.
I didn't like it.
Man, you have a knack for developing the emotional twist in the heart in all your stories. This one is quite unusual for its not common for you to write reconciliation stories. But you made it in such a way that i felt good at the end.
Keep it up man...and thanks to you and your lovely wife.
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