All Comments on 'When The Heartache is Over'

Comenting as a businessman: I think that the compnay should have made a better effort to eductae their employees in computer age technology. Although I do have some old semi-retirees who don't have any tech skills still doing their highly skilled manuel labour.

There is a company working on making technology i.e Iphones better suited for the older baby boomer generation.

Anyway thats just by the by. I'll comment on content later. Carry on Writing and I'll keep reading.

the fact he took back his whore of a wife kind of killed the story.

She was nothing but a slut but i guess some men like women that sleep around and fuck others and still declare love for them. To me those are worthless pieces of trash that need to be thrown away.

Commenting as a proof-reader .....

MickyMouse (sic) you need to press F7 more often, If you don't know what it does, then ask Manuel.

Nine was the quick count of errors in your brief effort, and that was not including the mis-use of i.e. And did you happen to notice the panel "Edit your Comment"

Yours distraughtly,

Kilroy

But as for the tale even at nine pages it was as good as ever, We all slightly suspend disbelief all the time.

Stang, gotta say that U've truly kept me entertained, Fur and November come to mind, among many others.....but this last tale is gettin' off into Matt Moreau territory......that being said, Mary sure sounds like my ex.......Thanx for all of your stories

Not my kind of story. I can't believe he took the bitch back!

matt moreau, makes me puke how anybody can live that way or write about it.

I have to say, That had the single stupidest contention point out of every story i've ever read, Let me get this right. She slept with her boss, So she could get her husband. Who she loves... a job in her office so they could be together all day.

Seriously man, Its time to stop writing.

... the most complicated plot I've read you to try to handle.

You're reaching, stretching. It was a little clumsy, but you'll grow into it.

Well done.

You make me smile and laugh again! I'm stealing the raccoon line!

There are times when your women are just so fucking pitiful and dumb that you feel sorry for them and want to give them a second chance. This was one of those times - but not to fucking often or you will have to add mm or jpb as initials to your name. 5

In order to win back the fool you fucked around on.... You tell him just what a lying conniving slut you really are and he takes you back? I gave you a **** for the originality of the reconciliation. As a fantasy it works in real life defenestration would have been in order.

I am glad to see that you have the guts to try anything.

I liked it.

You are just bound and determined never to create another new character so long a you live, aren't you?

Still a good storyteller, and god help LW without your input, but retire the cartoons and invent some people.

How sad it is when a good writer comes up with something as sorry as this tale.

I am afraid that that the explanation of why she fucked Lou did not win me over but it is author's choice and I did enjoy the ride up until the unwarranted reconciliation.

Yeah, I know, they loved each other! But,is that enough to heal the wounds?

Mustang man, sometimes you seriously disappoint me. This story was one of those times.

for a lifetime of being a whore.

no justice, one star.

try again.

Fuck all the naysayers. Mr. Star, of all the stories of yours I've read( I haven't missed too many), to me, this is your Pièce de Résistance. I thought it was great. Flowed extremely well, characters were great and they were consistent and the plot, while not intricate, still made me want to go to the next page. The only, slight, shortfall is the reason she cheated, I think financial trouble or something similar. 5 stars. Please write more stories like this. Maybe an amnesia plot next

If i had been hurt that bad, i would not have taken her back. Except! if i loved her that much and could trust again, i would have jumped at the chance. THANKS AGAIN

I like your work. But this gets a 3 only because I can not see things happening quite like this as the lady was so stupid in fucking to get her hubby a job working near her so they could be closer together. No one is that damn dumb. And no one gets hurt that bad and goes back to or doesn't divorce the other.

First, I'm sorry I don't have an account to be able to put up my name. That said, I have to say that I love reading lots of authors on Literotica, but you, SS06, are my ALL-TIME FAVORITE!!! I read your new stories almost the same day they're out. 5 stars isn't enough, and I have indeed read all of your tales. Please keep it going, and you will always have me anxiously waiting for your newest.

I have read every story ( I think). This one is right up there with the best.

I don't know where you get your ideas, or frankly where you get the time to write them, so thanks for the effort to keep us entertained and another great story.

Eight pages of gold, but that last page of tin knocked it down a star for me. Or in terms I usually use, this home run was caught on the warning track.

I often have a problem coming up with names for characters in my stories, but I do try to stay away from using such known characters as Lou Grant or Mary. Stang must be a fan of the old TV shows....perhaps he will use Andy or Gomer in his next story. lol

I don't get the extremes of BtB or saintly martyr-like forgiveness, and I don't know how realistic any story like this will feel, but I liked it. She was an idiot and a schemer, but she learned and there wasn't some string of guys before, and at least in her head she was trying to do something for their marriage.

Still a definite idiot, but a nice change to at least try to give someone another chance and have them actually learn from their mistakes.

great even tho i look forward to your submission sometimes i like you shorter ones better. this one was great. love the ending very plausible. get tired of those burn the bitch ending. i was throw down the gantlet to all the writer here can anyone write an story where the husband betrayed doesn't end up with an lot of money. be real i don't think any of you have tons of money

So she fucks her boss for 5 years and is rewarded by her husband. Sorry but what the fuck?

His wife lied, plotted and schemed to get some guy to steal his girlfriend away, then she fucks the guy as payment. Then she schemed and lied to get him fired and fucks her boss while degrading her husband as payment for the treachery, leaving her husband completely destroyed and suicidal. After all her back stabbing and betrayal, he takes her back and they live happily ever after? And this man supposedly founded a hugely successful business? No explanation of why he trusts her not to do it again, just "Oh great, tits!" This story just fell apart like you just got tired of writing. I've read all your stories and this is the first that got less than 4 stars. Looking forward to the next one.

I really enjoy how you produce one great one after another. Please keep them coming.

Even though the outcome seems unlikely, the story is a winner. I loved the characters & the interesting plot twists. Thanks.

No matter the topic, you always do a good story........and I keep reading them. thanks

A very interesting story-I couldn't stop reading it.

I felt very sorry for Grace who was attractive compassionate, intelligent, astute and perceptive unlike the slutty and undeserving Elvina who 'only' had two large appendages. Grace would probably have been a much better mother too!

The author should be rather tougher on his editors and vice versa. While recognising that editing is harder than it looks spelling mistakes and omitted-word errors do detract from the story

I'm usuallly a Stangstar fan. After reading some of these commments, I've been trying to figure out what was there to like about this story? It pissed me off.

I'll have to agree with some of the other commenters. This was a tough read. Usually when I read one of SS06 stories I can flow right through it. He is one of my favorite authors on here. That didn't happen this time though. I will have to also say that I didn't like the ending. I would've rather seen him end up with Grace. There really wasn't much to like about Elvina. All women are a little bit manipulative but she was down right shady about it! It's hard to enjoy a story when you absolutely depise one of the characters that you're supposed to like in the end. It just kind of made me mad that she won him back after being such a cunt for so long! Fuck the reason why she did it, to me it is irrelevent! 3*

Stang, I read your latest early this morning, and have been chewing the cud, as it were.....just a little background.....live in Texas, and most of my companeros are from points south.....nasty women find themselves in an interesting situation when they've been sold to a whorehouse in some dusty part of rural Mexico......hooked on smack and put in a stall...oh well...white women with tetas grandes, mighty popular.....so, while I ain't sayin' to let air in her head, some major comeuppance is seriously deserved, just for basic pride.....BTW, this happens more than U would think...Shoot, big tits like that, ten grand, and they transport the sleazy slut...and do the whole sad letter and newspaper thing....cheers, MGTOW

so why bother reading the 8 pages?

1. Vina lies and manipulates some dumb as shit ex boyfriend to steal away Danny's geek girlfriend

2 Then Vina decides that the only way to get Danny to work with her in her office every day is get him FIRED?... now that is True Love

and of course she just HAS to fuck Lou to get this done right ?

congrats SS06 you are the new JPB....

3 so naturally after wasting 30 minutes reading this ... danny takes her back... um why???.... oh yeah big tits

SS6,

Tell me it isn't so!

Tell me you aren't becoming CS6 (Cuckstang6)!!

"I'm just a woman that made a mistake" sums up the central therme/lie here.

But that is not correct!!

Burning the brownies is a mistake.

Even running a red light is a mistake.

But lying to and deceiving your husband, having sex with another guy and trash talking your husband while you're at it (for whatever reason) is NOT "just a mistake."

If she had shot someone so he could take that person's job and work close to her, would the courts have said "ah, shucks! just a mistake" and given her a pass?

No. HELL NO!!

If you are going to turn into MM, etc I for one, won't need to continue reading your heretofore great stories.

I agree with CBM - somehow I was rooting for this psychotic first wife in spite of her obvious and many flaws. Fabulous mystery as to why she did what she did. Excellent resolution of the loose ends. Clever and original.

Harry if you are such a genius perhaps you need to start posting YOUR stories so we can piss all over them like you do to others every week. Stang and his trusty editor MOTB do a fantastic job and I for one really appreciate their imagination and craftsmanship.

have nothing to do with whether or not he should have taken her back. For those who are upset by that - it's a story! Get over it!

My complaint, however is that there is so much totally unnecessary repetition in it. It's like one of those awful documaentaries on the Discovery channel where, after each break for adverts, they have to go over everything in the previous part just in case the audience has lost it in two minutes or so!

Take all the repetition and recalls out and this would be a good story of about 4 or 5 pages. Your writing may be good - but you really need to make it tighter!

"HOW-MUCH-I-MISSED-THISSSSSSSSS," The last word was drawn out as she collapsed onto me, her breasts heaved and I could feel her sheath clutching and fluttering my member.

she fucked on the job, whore, and while looking for her husband she loves so much she keeps fucking the loser she got caught with. Can you say dumb ass broad. Easy way to find, with name change, social security number. She is married to him income tax filing.

She wasnt worth marrying in the first place. The wen was a much better choice. Best thing what he said call there company get both fired and get on with life instead of going thru same thing a few years later.

You dont bring the trash home you throw it out

Not the usual Stangstar BTB type story, but to be honest, I really genuinely enjoyed this one. Although the wife had some issues, her intentions were well-founded.

well written reguardless of what the dullard's say. I get that you're writing drama with a little romance and all that stuff. I am confused as to why he would take her back, but it is after all your story. It was really close to a Matt M. story but the small differences kept it just out of range. Gave it a 4****.

Elvina's concept of love is, at best, self-serving, if not indicative of narcissistic personality disorder. And yet for all her manipulative, self-serving, hedonistic, and scheming, we are supposed to believe that she loves Danny and wants what is best for him? Puh-leez, this woman should have been torched. You used to be a good writer StangStar--now you're just a long-winded JPB....

Well SS06 showing his other side!!!

Not your usual ending but still think you're a great story teller.

5*

Great!!!...I am wiping a few tears away due to memories...but I so look forward to Thursdays now!

Well written, as usual. The plot is painful as is often the case in these stories as well as in relationships. The hitchhiker almost had it right, "Love is for suckers". Actually obsession is for suckers. I have not too many wives that truly love their husbands that fuck other men. Elvina would have to be severely mentally retarded to fuck her boss just to get her husband moved over to her office. (weak plot device) That is the stuff of nightmares and drug use, not reality. That kind of takes you out of the story. The shattered man goes off and is able to get over his pain enough to become a wildly successful multimillionaire - the stuff of a 14 year-old's fantasy. Then he takes the old bag he's addicted to back after 5 years of fucking her boss? YUCK! Who's fantasy is that? Maybe a middle aged menopausal woman's wet (Dry?) dream or some weird "wimp"? ICK! You have a great way of spinning a tale, but it often leads to some strange places.

I didn't like it.

Man, you have a knack for developing the emotional twist in the heart in all your stories. This one is quite unusual for its not common for you to write reconciliation stories. But you made it in such a way that i felt good at the end.

Keep it up man...and thanks to you and your lovely wife.

Yikes. Oh boy yet another dim-witted clueless heart o' gold genius who is hopelessly in love with a crass manipulative bitch/whore. And yes - with an absolute minimum of drama - he forgives her EVERY transgression and infidelity. The only missing cliche was that Danny/Cal was either ex-CIA or Navy Seal. C'mon Stang you're a much better storyteller than this contrived soap opera crap.

... I realize every story can't be a BTB but this one was certainly polar opposite of anything that I've ever read by you. I was actually shocked when you made an established skanky-assed whore the heroine of your story. To say I was disappointed would be a gross understatement. I gave this 1 star effort 3 stars for two reasons: 1. Considering your body of work, which I mostly like, I just didn't have the heart to say that I hated the work. Thus, an extra star. 2. I gave it another extra star because the story was submitted in one piece instead of being chopped up into two or three chapters. Considering the ending, that would have been damn near criminal.

I like most of your stories. Don't listen to the losers who like to shit on your work. If they hate it so much why the fuck keep reading it?

Anyway, did you resolve what Mary said on the plane about Lou lying? He manipulated her, and was successful since she's as dumb as a box of rocks, but how did he lie?

The one thing you can't have as an author is the reader knowing where you're going every time. The reconciliation in this story will keep us guessing in the next.

I've enjoyed many of your stories and this one is no exception.

Taking the reader on a journey that is believable while tugging the heart strings as well. Even as 'Suri' stumbles over the phrasing the meaning is not lost.

Can't wait for next weeks installment.

and stupid, stupid, stupid.

Same old same old, doesn't matter what twists or complications you put into a story SS, its the SAME damn thing every time! You used to be one of my favorite writers on here, but I won't be reading your stories again.

Of course the traditional elements are there: faultless husband, new girl, daughter, Mustangs, man who becomes a bazillionaire, incredily inept and stupid villains (Lou-ral and Hottie)

But...the Grace thing was a bit of a nice twist. She didn't get the husband. She messed up her life...and I felt more sorry for her than for Elvira...or whatever her name was.

It would have been nice if Cal lost his halo and was banging the wife of an invalid and had to make some harsh choices. No, I'm not condoning infidelity, but...that is a thorny situation which adds a hell of a lot of drama. Not to mention the ensuing corporate fall out.

But I like murky stories sometimes. Maybe I'm part Russian.

men try to write from a woman's perspective, and vice versa. it's always off. ALWAYS.

There was no redeeming feature in this story - plot, subplot, scenes, dialogues, characters - Nothing!

He gets to stay married to a cheating skank, albeit a gorgeous one.

Woop-De-Doo!

Keeping her around as a fuck buddy would be perfectly acceptable, but staying married that is just plain disturbing.

You already had your RAAC story for this year, and even that one was better than this shit.

I recommended testosterone replacement therapy to Matt Morau, who lately seems to be trying to grow a pair. I will make the same recommendation to you, in the hope that you don't turn into a total non-man.

I fear that marriage is slowly turning you into a eunuch, which is starting to affect your writing. I expect you'll soon be trading in the "Mouse-Bang" for a Subaru, or worse yet some kind of van.

Please! Take a few weeks off to let the testosterone replacement treatments take effect before trying to write anything again.

Stange, someone wrote in the comments section that your just another matt moreau. While your stories dont degrade men to that level the intention does seem similar. Please read the comments and dont make your male characters such wimps in the name of "true love". Please dont do this. And, Please respond to these comments so we as readers know why you do this.

You're a very good story teller and right now you're going through a phase where you are being a little self-indulgent on crafting longer stories with independent, coordinated story lines. It reminds me of the later Columbo episodes where Peter Falk directed himself way too lovingly.

But, I found the comments to be so hilarious that I had to give the story 5 stars to encourage you to keep tormenting your benighted readers.

I did enjoy the story, but I see now the price of weekly stories: you are crafting themed stories like you would make cupcakes, they are well done, but not done with the passion that would be in birthday cake you made for your young daughter. I look forward to the next story you *need* to tell.

I did like this one but it was a four star because I felt the happily ever after ending was a disappointment. I find it amazing that most commenters will wade through a nine page story then complain about it because they didn't like the ending the author chose. I personally like the perspective change, seeing the story through each character's eyes gives a story a depth of understanding. I will say that the conversation between Mary and Elvina was really a waste of time if you had no intention of explaining the lie Lou told. You always find a twist and Grace was no exception. One character with integrity is better than none. All the "haters" aside I thought this was one of the better stories you've submitted recently. Always look forward to the next one. (Loved the foiled robbery attempt)

Wow, a totally different ending than usual! I love your scorched earth policy, but this was well written and a great ending! Well done keep it up!!! (But please don't forget the scorched earth policy) lol

Stang your fascination with mammaries and mustangs is quite ok, but to venture into the Dark Side is down right vulgar. I wonder if that Matt guy drives a mustang? Do take into account your reputation. I can see only a 2 here and it is given grudglingly.

This story would totaly suck, but for one redeaming factor... It's set in reality! People are strange creatures. They do fucked up things, all the time, for all the wrong reasons. Yes, you pissed off the BTB crowd, but what the hell. If you read here, it's okay for them to go fuck around and keep the girl. But I digress. My only wish is that you didn't feel that you had to pump out these stories so fast. I'd lve to see what you could come up with it you took your time and really did some indepth writing.

Myhands316

I was reading through the comments and someone complained about Mary not sharing what the lie was that Lou told Vina... think! He was never going to hire Danny at the company. She was his piece of tail. If he was iinsecure, he wanted Danny as far away as possible. In fact, the thought of ruining a man gave him a sense of power over him. Don't expect to be spoonfed!

Nice work SS06! I don't always agree with your endings, or even the stories for that matter, but they're always well written even when I hate them. Liked this one for it's suprise ending from you. Awesome twist! Looking forward to next week. 5*

I warned that you were risking burn out through over production. this condfirms my fears - this is terrible. You're going down the drain fast.

Now all i can picture is the ever lovely Elvira, Mistress of the Dark. It's good to be me. :)

While I think the use of TV character names is kind of humorous, it is getting kind of old. I gave the story 5* anyway, just because I thought it was almost up to the standard you set with O.I.N.D. Good plot--glad it's not a typical revenge story. I am also VERY happy you didn't bring up the "I can forgive you, but can't trust you" thing which is extremely stale.

I'm looking forward to the next story.

... from your normal divorce the cheating wife and find another, better woman and live happily ever after while the ex wallows in pain. Despite the somewhat unrealistic development of Danny's business into a multi-billion dollar enterprise this one had a feeling of reality to it. Yes, we are supposed to suspend disbelief - that's part of entertainment, be it movies, spoken word or reading, but developing a Google-like business practically in Hawaii just seems a little far fetched. In the end, though, that didn't take away from the enjoyment of the story. You did a good job of developing the characters, although I would have liked a little more about Mary and how she fell out of love with Lou. After all, she didn't really want sex with him and then let his sexual escapades pull them apart even though she appreciated the freedom from having to have sex with him. All in all a good effort.

I gave it 5* in part due to everyone except Lou ending up happy. Another satisfying read.

I love the use of TV characters/stars. It adds a bit of twisted humor to these. It would have been a kick if one of these characters were Steve McGarett or maybe Thomas Magnum or even Danny Williams!

I skipped over several paragraphs as she re-told her story of her early years, etc., as that had already been told in chronological order. Not sure what the retelling was supposed to accomplish.

The ending was like driving through a series of s-curves, and I ended up a little disoriented when it was over. That's OK; it's just different.

I don't understand how your women characters claim to love their husbands but then decide to guck the over. She really thought it was a good idea to fuck Lou so Danny could work with her? What kind of bullshit logic is that? Add that to the fact the she was still fucking that dumbass Lou the entire time she "desperately" looked for Danny? What, she was gonna Danny I love u but I've been fucking the same guy u caught me with for the last four years, but its okay because I love u and he never made me come! I used to like ur stories but they're repetitive and now the husband keeps going back when it's obvious he shouldn't.

okay. I did like it. BUT....I didn't really like Elvina. I was disappointed she got everything in the end. At the end I really did want it to be Grace and him, or at least Grace getting a baby from him if that's what she would have wanted. As usual though, I like your writing and find it amazing that you can keep up with the schedule you have to give us new items.

People are just people and Elvina and Danny/Calvin were just that "people". People can be super educated all degrees to prove it. Maybe even super IQ's to match their other stuff but still are people. They can be poorer than bullfrogs or zillionaires but still people. This story hits between the eyes of the reader that it is about two people with people problems. Everyone which stands at an alter or other place when they marry usually don't think about getting screwed up into a situation causing pain to their spouse unless of course they have serious issues with their brain. Elvina was a quintessential devoted wife til she went braindead and screwed Lou which was stretching the envelope of plausibility. However, we all know people can really be stupid even when it doesn't make any sense. There is a moral and legal issue in defining Elvina's actions with Lou but the author allowed us to see something else. Love is hard for me to define and there are people a great deal smarter than me who haven't done much better at it than me. This story shows us what it can do if we allow it. My own knee jerk reaction was to see Danny just pull up a tank and fire away at Elvina and Lou and suicide. That would be interesting but not an enjoyable story for me at least, unless I was thinking about my ex on a darker day. No, this author gave us a nice excursion from the the norm in order to demonstrate what could be possible if we let it happen.Honestly, I've been married more times than I ever wanted to and I still have feelings that I have in my heart that will never go away. I think with the divorce rate being what it is, I am not a too rare exception to this fact of life, that being we move on without releasing ourselves from the piece of aching love that refuses to leave. It is for that reason, I find this story as opportunity to fantasize into the "what if ?". The author gave us a nice view of the foolishness that people do but the fantasy of what's possible.

It MAY have been deliberate, but Vina came across as a dull woman (seriously in love) with big tits! Nothing wrong with being pectorally blessed, but that was about it!

The rationale for a couple of weeks of screwing her boss HAD TO BE a test of the readership! First, did she think (awkward word, in this context) that getting drilled by the Boss-Man was going to terminate once Hubby got hired? "Until boredom do you part!"...and her boobs were described as majestically non-boring! Second, did Boss act like the kinda guy who could or would strive for discretion? Stang, ya gotta stop sniffing the Hi-Test - there's a note on the pump warning you about that shit!

Nonetheless, overall a 5* tale...the reconciliation tactic assured that. Sweetie (still) don't play fair! Little-known fact (to men!) is that firm conviction and righteousness are suspended in a guy's cum...one good orgasm (is there such a thing as a BAD one?) is enough to drain ALL a man's resoluteness! Cave in like a sink-hole!

Once again, loved your story and gave it a 5, although I will say she didn't deserve that happy of an ending. Reconciliation is tricky, especially with the bridges she burned. I do like happy endings, but I felt like something else should have happened, since their marriage was inevitably changed forever. Especially knowing she never left Lou. He almost needed a "Hall Pass" at the end of the story, even though he'd never use it (she doesn't have to know that). Or maybe she needed to fall into a submissive roll as she worked off the penence. Not sure, but still a great story! (STILL pushing for a While You Were Sleeping sequel with Rick and Millicent, btw)!

Your universe, so you populate it the way you want. You might, however, try adding a man with at least two active brain cells to the cast once in a while just for the novelty. She continues to fuck her boss and lets him urinate on her for recreation and he still takes her back. How can he not see how manipulative and pathelogically self-centered she has been? When you get a man down you don't quit, you just keep pounding him into a bloody mess of jelly. I'd feel sorry for Danny/Cal except she laid all out in front of him and he still took her back. We deserve the hell we make for ourselves.

Your story did a good job conveying the emotional trauma Elvina and Danny/Cal went through. Mary comes across as just as much but better at scheming than Elvina. Grace really did come out the loser in this. All in all you did a great job in developing some interesting characters and then blending them together in a story that I found myself sitting on the edge of my chair trying to figure out where you were going next with it.

Great job, Stang. MTB, despite a couple of really small slip ups I still think you did a good job editing this. Both of you please keep on doing what you are doing.

To pr counterpoint a previous commentor: a=always a joy to read your work, b=one of the best writer/editor combos writing on this site, c=cars that go vroom-vroom instead of whine-whine, d=devil in the details that you seem to always stay on top of, e=enjoyable reading so hard to find but you do provide that regularly, f=frankly I don't know why some folks don't just vote with stars and quit raining on other folk's parade with vitrolic comments....

Glad to see the ending done differently. Maybe it's the growing lust for blood or the resulting cartoony violence showing up lately, but the consequences stories are losing their appeal for me. Besides, it's harder to write a good reconciliation and make it feel believeable and emotionally genuine than it is to do things the other way. It takes a higher class of writer.

Do please create some new people to populate. Characterization can stagnate, too...and it does you no favors.

Man, that thing really sucked.

Idiotic premise, lumbering plot and god-awful dialogue.

The only good thing was that you managed to avoid inserting another of your boring Mustang descriptions in the story.

New to this site. Third story that I've read. I love romance, specially happy endings. Thanks for this.

SS06, You are a genius. I have read several of your stories and I loved all of them, but this one. Wow! You brought the damn thing. Abso-freaking-ly fantastic. 5 stars

this is AWESOME! You changed it up a bit. Not what I was expecting at all!! Last weeks story showed us how good you are, this weeks showed you could turn your same old basic plot around and make it come out well.

Thanks!!

After a lot of turmoil, a nice resolution. Thank you SS06.

this one ended too quickly. The reconciliation process is as important as the build-up.

At least this is my opinion. That is where we learn who the characters are. Also, what happened to Grace and her spouse?

Thanks.

Rich

I was reading this and began to think of how much it sounded like a Rehnquist story. The best I have ever read from you.

Then I got to the part where she began explaining why she had sex with Lou. "I had never cheated on you Danny and I know it was wrong but, I just wanted you so badly." Let me get this straight ... She has sex with her boss in order to orchestrate a job for her husband - all because she loves him and needs him near her so badly. That is single handedly the stupidest explanation I have ever heard. It makes no sense. I was hoping you would recoup and have her explain that her boss has forced her to do it as the only way he would hire her husband. But no, you kept having her mention how it was her scheme. Apparently, instead of just asking her boss to hire her very qualified husband (as any normal person would do), she approaches him and offers to become his fuck toy in order to get Danny the job. She did not strike me as an idiot, or as a person who used sex in such a mindlessly casual way. I understand you had her doing that to get together with Danny in the first place, but you did not write her that way once they became an item. So, I am torn. I feel like you wrote her in a manner that made the reader like her. In reality, she is simply a manipulative bitch willing to use sex to get anything she wants. I guess i am forced to accept the latter version of Elvina, since you have her continually bringing up the fact that she didn't really cheat, that she loves only him, that's its always only been him (except when she was fucking Lou), yada, yada. OMG you even having her get angry with him when he suggests that Lou was her lover. I sense she is truly sorry, but I don't think it is for having sex. To her that was no big deal. She is sorry for scheming, sorry for what he overheard, sorry he found out. Sorry she did Lou? I think her response was along the lines of . . . You didn't really think I could love a 50 year old guy, did you? Silly Danny! Don't confuse having his dick in my cunt as anything serious. And he actually buys it and takes her back?

It is still you best ever, I just think a different reason for her adultery would have made it perfect. Wonderfully written, with brilliant development of each character. very Rehnquist-esque. Five stars all the way.

Either the haters have moved on or learned a bit - not flames in the last few comments cool.

I think I like the ending lol - actually I do and agree with how you did it - Grace loves him and cannot be there for him so she gets him with 'Vina - it works

He needs 'Vina - he should not probably but he does so be it, you found a way for them to work through it and Grace helped - nice -

Danny/Cal - thick in the head - a bit st00pid too but a good man for a cowardly sort - he ran from himself and that never works -

Elvina - so smart and yet so dumb - the scheme was born of frustration and a moronic logic only big tits can reason out - after years of thinking around her tits and being smarter - she thought with them and fucked up everything she had. Well she was damaged goods form childhood and tolerated what no one should - we know her basic good quality from the early lines about losing her job rather than selling herself (again). There is some logic to continuing with her dickhead boss and using him this time but it was a pretty risky investment.

Really nice - Mary was very important to help us all arrive at the right place in time for the ending heh.

Thanks -

nice story...but one of the stupidest reason for cheating...and keeping doin that for years...so I didn't like the reconciliation part.

I like it not all people can work thru hardships, but the ones that do become stronger. She did the wrong thing but for the right reason.

FIRE HATE DOOM DEATH!!

errr.... yeah Great story stang!!

Saw a comment mentioning a lack of hate n flames so there ya go!

She may have been a complete moron... but i think taking this one back was a good call.

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No, not Rehnquist...

DQS1 if I'm not mistaken, but more homage than style mimicry. That is - lots of similar images and some similar language, but not the same intent.

SS6 writes stories of the everyman, with Mustangs.

DQS writes stories about archtypes, with large breasts.

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I have read all of your stories more than once except the newest ones which i'm now reading and I must say this is my third attempt (attempt being the key word ) at reading this one. The first 2 times, I stopped reading shortly after starting it, it was just to boring. But this time I decided I had read the rest so I will give this one a chance, and i'm happy to say, I'm glad I did. It has lived up to the usual great read i'm used to from you , but from now on don't let the lead up be so long it becomes boring. Great work.

I liked the story and I am a sucker for reconciliation. When the wife learns her lesson after she's gone through the fire and loves her husband even more, I am all for it. Of course, lots of people aren't going to like it because they always want some kind of vindication. Me on the other hand, I like stories with heart. 5 stars.

I stopped reading when Numb Nuts took the cheating whore back. She was a lying, conniving, manipulative whore. She spreads her legs for other men just to get what she wants. Hell, she continued to whore herself to her boss for 5 years, while claiming she loved her husband. She told Numb Nuts that she continued to fuck her boss, but it was OK because he already knew about him. No redemption, or any likeable characters in this story, so there should have been no reconciliation. All the male characters were limp losers and all the female characters were scheming bitches. Shit story.

That was the weakest excuse ever for cheating. "I fucked my boss so I could get you fired, because I want us to work together". That's fucking retarded. Maybe he liked his job! How about just saying, "honey, I want us to work together"? Selfish.

Loved the "love is for suckers" reference though.

I love reading the comments. It must be nice to be perfect and never made a mistake. Or being so smart all the time that you never make a mistake. Once when I was at a party with close friends. My wife had to leave to go to work, but I stayed on . We were playing cards and drinking. When the husband, my best friend, passed out we decided it was time to stop. I helped his wife, my wife's best friend, get hubby to bed. At the front door we said goodbye and I started to kiss her on the cheek as usual when she turned it into a lip kiss and started tickling my tonsils. I was surprised drunk enough to let it go on for a while. Just as I was starting to think how enjoyable the night might be, the last part of my sober brain came alert and I stopped it. If I had been just a little drunker, I would have done something stupid. From then on I always made sure that I never drank as much just to be on the safe side. Doing something stupid can happen to anyone, and it is usually when they don't expect it.