All Comments on 'Mary's Awakening'

Good for what you were trying to do. Not trying to write a character-driven, dialogue and setting heavy tale. Just a girl being taken and submitting to a train in all her holes. And for that, it succeeded. Pretty well written, hot, nasty, dirty over the top sex. Certainly pushed the limits of believability, but it's fantasy, so no one gets hurt, everyone has fun, thay all do what they want and enjoy it. Thanks!

You want fucked? Doesn't anyone know there needs to be two more words? You want TO BE fucked? Seems like writers--and non-writers--these days have either gotten very lazy or don't have a clue of good grammar. USE ALL THE WORDS THAT BELONG IN A SENTENCE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Might have been a decent story if it was written properly. 0*

A great story. Very graphic. Lots of erotic detail.....loved it. Amy next? Obvious sequel eagerly awaited...!

Great story. love the way your mind works. Will there be a part 2??

I loved this story. It's not perfect but it's erotic. I like to think that there are a few women out there who might agree.