All Comments on 'Playing in Alice's Wonderland 01A'

by Lionel_Johnson

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
excellent start...but

Your descriptive style is very good bit do not rely on spell check. Board is a flat piece of wood most commonly used in building, bored is human feeling of disinterest and apathy towards a current activity. Editors are worth the time and effort

AnonymousAnonymousabout 11 years ago
:) keep going

I have high hopes for you, don't give up. comments are good to learn from negative and positive comments give you ideas on what you can improve on! It was defiantly a good start.

Lionel_JohnsonLionel_Johnsonabout 11 years agoAuthor
Thanks for the comments

Thanks very much for commenting, Without your feedback I can not improve my work. I have never been very confident when it comes to writing. To see that someone thinks that my work is worth the feedback and that people are willing to help and encourage me is enough to make my day.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago

you spelled bored wrong

AnonymousAnonymousover 4 years ago
not bad

Not bad but there are a few errors; 'board' should actually be 'bored.' Although both will be accepted by spellcheck the meaning is quite different.

Also, assuming this is set in the original period (and if it isn't that should be made clear in some way) some of the historical details are a bit off. Young ladies' underwear in Victorian times consisted of corsets, drawers and petticoats, not bras and panties.

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